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1) Lightning Injury

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Assignment #2
Lightning Injuries; in DynaMed [Internet]: EBSCO Information Services. Record No. T919353, [updated 2018 Nov 30, cited 2019 Nov 5]. Available from https://www.dynamed.com/topics/dmp~AN~T919353. 1) I visited the Queen’s Health Library website under the “Medicine” section. From there I visited the “Point of Care Tools” and found Dynamed. I searched “lightning injury” and found the Dynamed point of care guideline for Lightning Injury. 2) While visiting the Point of Care Tools section I considered using the BMJ Best practice guidelines. However, the article available in BMJ best practice was broader and described mostly electrical injury with only a small lightning injury subsection.

3) This source was chosen as it is a high quality peer-reviewed source for information on lightning injury. It directly addresses the health effects of lightning injury and has expert clinician editors. This resource was also recently updated in November 2018.

4) -The source is a secondary source comprised of expert, evidence-based review

-The source is recently updated (Nov 2018)

-The source uses information from authoritative viewpoints. The authors are clinicians with expertise in the field

-Dynamed uses a grading system to rate the level of evidence available for a statement within an article

5) This source will be used to describe the health effects of lightning injury. Within the wikipedia article currently the descriptions of short-term health effects are editorialized and use first-person anecdotal stories. In contrast, the Dynamed best practice guideline is written by clinicians and has a factual description of potential health outcomes following a lightning injury.

Assignment #3
Signs and symptoms

Article Modifications:

Change #1:

We will be removing the sentence “A bolt of lightning can reach temperatures approaching 28,000° Celsius (50,000° Fahrenheit) in a split second. This is about five times hotter than the surface of the sun..”

Rationale for proposed change: This sentence is being removed due to lack of relevance and the lack of context as the article focuses on the human physiological effects of lightning injury. Additionally, this sentence impairs the flow of the article.

Controversy:We acknowledge that some readers may like to read about the energy of lightning strikes in the context of other thermal reference points but we believe this is better suited to the “lightning strikes” article that is linked, rather than adding this section to the “lightning injury” article.

Critique of Source: We do not disagree with the source (Sun fact sheets, published by Nasa.gov) but believe instead that this fact is better suited to another Wikipedia article. Additionally, a better source would be a secondary review article related to sun temperatures, if this was to be included.

Change #2

We will be changing, “ Lightning burns are a skin condition, a type of electrical burn following a lightning strike. They are characterized by a unique pattern of skin lesions.Alternative names for them include "keraunographic markings", "feathering", "ferning", "Lichtenberg figures", "lightning flowers" or "lightning trees".

The sentence will be changed to “Lighting burns result from energy caused by lightning strikes, and are characterized by a unique pattern of skin lesions. These tree-like lesions resemble feathering or ferning, and are also called “Lichtenberg figures.”

Rationale for proposed change: This sentence is more clear and also better describes the pattern of lightning injury with less editorializing language. The amount of descriptive imagery in the original article was unnecessary. We have also updated the reference from an outdated and not peer-reviewed BBC article. In this articles’ place, we have decided to updated the reference to Dynamed. This reference is expert-reviewed and written by emergency medical physicians.

Critique of source: The source is a peer-reviewed secondary source which is appropriate to use for Wikipedia. There is low chance that the article is biased because it is written by a physician without apparent financial benefit. The article was updated in 2018 by a credentialed emergency medicine physician.

Lightning Injuries; in DynaMed: EBSCO Information Services. 1995 - . Record No. T919353, [updated 2018 Nov 30, cited 2019 Nov 18]. Available from https://www.dynamed.com/topics/dmp~AN~T919353.


 * Good edits! I really liked the cleaned up version of the Lichtenberg figure description. It reads much better and has less unnecessary/irrelevant details. Well done! - HW