User:Jckmena/Crucian carp/Emigracew Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jckmena


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jckmena/Crucian_carp?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Crucian carp
 * Crucian carp

Evaluate the drafted changes
·      The information is this is very well presented! There are just a few edits that I would make.

·      In the second sentence “predatory” should be changed or add pike or perch after the word fish.

·      The second sentence is also the only one that I did not initially understand what it was trying to say. It is a little bit like a run on and the section “from a sleeker to a deeper bodied form, into almost perfect disc shape with well-rounded fins,” makes it seem like there are 3 forms, not 2

·      You have 2 references that have no link.