User:Jclawlor/Marine geology/Sharleen Lawrence Peer Review

General info
(provide username)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jclawlor


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jclawlor/Marine_geology?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Marine geology :

Evaluate the drafted changes
Clarity:

- Information is clear and related to article topic.

- Every heading has good concise information about topic plus heading// Sections Broken up good

- Leading paragraph is informative and holds a good amount of information

Structure:

- The structure is divided well and the heading are in a good order

- starting with the history, allows good background information about the topic

- Referencing towards each subheading is shown properly

Balance and Coverage

- Lots of coverage of the history which is good, and all information about the history is neutral

- The methods heading, information stated is has good coverage on the different ways to collect data

- The draft article as a whole is good within neutrality, no biases are indicated

- Every section has quality information and the coverage towards each heading is informative

Sources:

- good range of sources

- the sources that were picked are good peer reviewed journals

- lots of quality information within reference list

Improvements and Suggestions:

- Some sentences need a sources from the information being stated "The imaging can help determine the seafloors composition as harder objects generate a stronger reflectance and appear dark on the returned image. Softer materials such as sand and mud cannot reflect the arrays pulses as well so they appear lighter on the image." thats one example

- Lots of focus directed on history and methods more focus on geology and geochemical should be considered

- I see lots of wiki sources are presented, more incorportaion of peer reviewed sources

- Sentences are long and can be shortened to two sentences, "The extremophile organisms discovered living within and adjacent to those hydrothermal systems have had a pronounced impact on our understanding of life on Earth and potentially the origin of life within such an environment." this is an example of one.

- I suggest that you have the heading of 'Mariana Trench[edit]' and 'Overview[edit]' switched in order, due to the overview being more large scale towards the article