User:Jcookie7/Grande Otelo/Calebcleverly Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jcookie7


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jcookie7/Grande Otelo


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Grande Otelo

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead


 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * The introduction is good - it specifies Grande Otelo's given name, the time period in which he lived, as well as what he was most known for.

Content


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * For the most part, yes. However, the background information about his troubled childhood could probably be a bit more concise, since he was most known for his career as an adult.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * The existing English article contains an extensive list of Grande Otelo's filmography, which could be a nice addition to this article.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?
 * Inasmuch as it discusses an influential black actor, yes. I don't know anything about Grande Otelo's personal life beyond what was stated in the article, but if he encountered any instances of racism in his career, that would be an interesting addition.

Tone and Balance


 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * Not really. No personal assessment of Grande Otelo's acting ability was made, only that he is known as one of the great actors of Brazil.

Sources and References


 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles?
 * Yes. My one suggestion here would be to explain further who exactly considers Grande Otelo as one of the greatest Brazilian actors (i.e. whether he one any awards for his acting).

Organization


 * Is the content well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * At times the article felt a bit like a direct translation from Portuguese sources. The wording could be updated to flow more naturally in English.