User:Jdb004/Anti-Irish sentiment/Racoon dolphin Peer Review

General info
Jdb004
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jdb004/Anti-Irish_sentiment?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Anti-Irish sentiment

Lead

 * No changes to the lead have been made, which is fine. The current lead is short and sweet, and gives a high level definition of Anti-Irish sentiment, forms/examples of it, and where it is prevalent. Overall the lead is very high level but for a topic such as this I think that's ok. The additions added aren't huge enough to merit modifying this lead section.

Content

 * Content added is about English efforts in the Pre-Modern period to supress and prevent the spread of Irish culture. The content is honestly a great addition to the Pre-Modern section, as one of the most important things to cover about discrimination is it's institutionalization. The various laws and efforts added in the section are all very valuable additions to the article.

Tone and Balance

 * Tone is neutral and historical, and provides a good balance in both various efforts to supress Irish culture and the entire section as well.

Sources and References

 * 2 new sources are used, a law and a book. Referencing the law itself is good, although it might be worth getting another citation for the statement that it was the first attempt to phase out irish language (the law itself doesn't prove it's being first). No problems with the usage of the book.

Organization

 * The writing of the section could be improved somewhat. Overall grammar and sentence structure could be modified to provide more flow, as some parts of the edit contain many sentences that are short and abrupt, giving it a small amount of list vibes instead of a flowing article. Additionally, it might be worth clarifying a bit the later parts of the paragraph (whether the grammar schools were aimed at assimilating Irish to English culture or making sure existing English culture wasn't influenced by the Irish).

Overall

 * The edit makes very worthwhile contributions to the article, stays neutral, and the content itself is great. The main areas for growth are the 1 extra citation and some grammar/flow work, but as a base this is very good work, just needs a little bit of polishing.