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Hi, My feedback is in italics below. Regards, Dr. Haenn

for Wikipedia Article "Refugee crisis" under subsection "Europe" following "France"

Over the past two decades, Spain has transitioned from a country of emigration to a country of immigration. Great distinction! Immigrants are increasingly categorized and ranked by where they are migrating from. What are the categories that matter here?Spanish immigration law “irregularizes” people by making it impossible for immigrants to attain legal status. Even legal status is only temporary. ''These sentences are contradictory. One says immigrants cannot attain legal status, but the second says they can acquire a temporary legal status.'' Kitty Calavita's analysis of immigration documents suggests that marginalization and social and economic exclusion are primarily produced by law, rather than culture. Depending on the origin country, one can receive “preferred” status over another. ''Is "preferred" a legal term? If not, how are some migrants "preferred"?'' While others, such as Third World immigrants, can receive “outsider” status.

I think the following is a second paragraph. In the last three years put the dates since we do not know when someone will read your posting, the number of refugees seeking asylum in Spain has increased greatly. Do you have numbers? The refugee system in Spain has failed to keep up with these numbers. Spain offered asylum to 17,337 refugees before September 2017, yet only received 744 by July. ''Do you mean 17,337 people sought asylum but Spain only extended this status to 744 people? Otherwise the sentence sounds like they offered asylum to 17,000 people, but only 744 took them up on the offer.'' The Pew Research Center found that from July 2015 to May 2016, there was an increase in percentage point of the refugee population in many countries in Europe. However, Spain was one of the few countries that experienced a decrease. In the past decade, Spain has added more steps to their asylum procedures making it more difficult for refugee and asylum seekers to enter. This new immigration process deems asylum seekers as “inadmissible.” The process serves as a tool to deter refugees and asylum seekers, causing Spain to violate their international obligation to protect this group of people. ''Notice how the previous two sentences repeat information from the 1st paragraph, although the material here is stronger. I suggest you move those two sentences to combine with the information above. The following sentences feel tacked on. Can you connect these better to the previous information? A'' report written by María Ortega and Celia Ruiz uses the testimonies of Syrian refugees to give them a voice and allow them to share their experiences moving to a new country, such as Spain. The report also explains Europe’s response to the influx of refugees. Many of the refugees they spoke were from Syria who ended up in Sevilla, Spain.