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"Drama (graphic novel)" Drafting Edits to the Rough Draft: [edits in bold]

Reception and awards[edit]
Between 2012 and 2013, Drama received many positive remarks from various sources. Publishers Weekly states that Drama “sweetly captur[es]” the challenges that are associated with a middle school musical production.[5] Booklist Review claimed that Telgemeier is “prodigiously talented at telling cheerful stories with realistic portrayals of middle-school characters.” [6] Ada Calhoun of the NY Times Book Review comments, “Telgemeier’s use of color, created with the design team Gurihiru, is eloquent.”[1].

Both Publisher’s Weekly[4] and the Washington Post[5] claimed Drama to be one of the Best Books of 2012.

In 2012, Drama was then declared a Notable Children's Books and Teen Top Tens by the Association of Library Services to Children (ALSC) and the Young Adult Library Services Association (YALSA), which are all a part of the American Library Association.[6]

Also in 2012, NPR noted Drama as a novel that went under recognized. '''Glen Weldon, the interviewee of the review, explains how, “If somebody handed this book to me in seventh grade, I still would have been the same self-conscious jerk I am, but it would have helped. It would have helped so much.”  '''

NPR also named Drama a “5 Great Summer Reads for Teens” in 2013. Petra Mayer, an author for NPR, describes the artwork in the novel as, “...simple but animated, and delightfully expressive.”

Drama has won a 2013 Stonewall Book Award in Children's and Young Adult Literature, an award given by the American Library Association that serves to recognize authors who tackle LGBTQ related topics.[7]

Drama has been nominated for a Harvey Award in 2013 by a group of comic-book professionals for excellence in comics.[8]  The Harvey Award is one of the most prestigious and oldest accomplishments within the comic industry.[1]

Also in 2013, the American Library Association deemed Drama as a Top 10 Great Graphic Novels for Teens.[2]

Drama was placed on the Rainbow List in 2013, which is an annual list of books that are reviewed by the Committee of the Gay, Lesbian, Bisexual, and Transgender Round Table of the American Library Association.[3]

Controversy[edit]
Drama has been challenged by some parents and critics for being "sexually explicit" and for having "subject matter too advanced for elementary students."[9][10] In 2014, Drama made the American Library Association list of top 10 banned books due to a ban in Chapel Hill Elementary School in Mount Pleasant, Texas.[11] However, the details regarding the Chapel Hill Elementary School ban since, "there has been no news coverage ... so details are thin on the ground." Its use has also been restricted in Seele Elementary School in New Braunfels, Texas in 2014.[10]  At Kirbyville Junior High in Kirbyville, Texas, the book was banned for being "politically, racially, or socially offensive," in 2016.[12] During the 2016-17 school year, Drama was banned in the Franklin Independent School “most likely ... due to the storyline involving a crush between two male friends of main character Callie.” That year, Drama was the only novel noted on the Texas ACLU list of banned books for the 2016-17 school year. The Comic Book Legal Defense Fund believes that Drama was banned at that school because of its plot with many developing crushes involving three friends, two of which are males. In Texas, Drama has been banned for the third time in a row between 2014 and 2018. [7]

Common Sense Media, a company that organizes media by age-appropriateness, has marked Drama as suitable for readers over 14 years of age. Common Sense Media acknowledges that "some readers may be uncomfortable with the graphic novel's depiction of homosexual crushes between young teens."[18]

Michelle Abate, an Associate Professor of Literature for Children and Young Adults at the Ohio State University, argues, “...the graphic novel demonstrates the limitations of LGBTQ youth advocacy that does not remain cognizant of intersectionality, while it also highlights the problem with millennial forms of liberal multiculturalism that omit critical discussions about race.”[8] In her opinion, the musical production of Moon over Mississippi in Drama, fails to recognize the prevalence of racism that originated in the South, but still exists today everywhere.[8] According to Abate, the production itself serves as a way of romanticizing the Antebellum South and promotes the ideology of white supremacy from that era.

In response to backlash for portraying gay characters in a children's book, Telgemeier has said that Drama was supported by Scholastic and is the reason why she is so thankful. [13]Telgemeier responded by saying, "sexuality is a part of your identity that doesn’t necessarily apply to what you are doing with other people when you are eight or nine years old" and that she doesn't attempt to force her viewpoints on anyone.[2] She explained that her "agenda is love and friendship. People will make of it what they will and I can’t let that sway the things I believe and the things I write about."[2]

"Drama (graphic novel)" Drafting Edits: [edits are in bold]

Reception and awards[edit]
Drama has received largely positive reviews by book critics throughout the years. Publishers Weekly said that Drama presents the challenges that are associated with a middle school musical production.[5] Booklist Review claimed in 2012 that through her portrayal of middle school characters, Telgemeier is extremely skilled in joyful and intriguing storytelling. [6] Ada Calhoun of the NY Times Book Review said that as a former tech director, she can vouch for the genuineness of the novel in that it is through the monotone routines of the crew behind the scenes that relationships develop and friendships prevail.[1].

Drama has won a 2013 Stonewall Book Award in Children's and Young Adult Literature, an award given by the American Library Association that serves to recognize authors who tackle LGBTQ related topics.[7]

Drama has been nominated for a Harvey Award in 2013 by a group of comic-book professionals for excellence in comics.[8]  The Harvey Award is one of the most prestigious and oldest accomplishments within the comic industry.

Also in 2013, the American Library Association deemed Drama as a Top 10 Great Graphic Novels for Teens.

Drama is also placed on the Rainbow List in 2013 which is an annual list of books that are reviewed by the Committee of the Gay, Lesbian, Bisexual, and Transgender Round Table of the American Library Association.

Both Publisher’s Weekly and the Washington Post claimed Drama to be one of the Best Books of 2012.

In 2012, Drama was then declared a Notable Children's Books and Teen Top Tens by the Association of Library Services to Children (ALSC) and the Young Adult Library Services Association (YALSA), which are all a part of the American Library Association.

'Then, in 2017 Drama'' was named one of the best graphic novels by the Washington Post. [cannot cite because I don't have subscription.]'''

Controversy[edit]
Drama has been challenged by some parents and critics for being "sexually explicit" and for having "subject matter too advanced for elementary students."[9][10] In 2014, Drama made the American Library Association list of top 10 banned books due to a ban in Chapel Hill Elementary School in Mount Pleasant, Texas.[11] However, the details regarding the ban are limited since there was no coverage on it. At Kirbyville Junior High in Kirbyville, Texas, the book was also banned for being "politically, racially, or socially offensive," in 2016[12] Its use has also been restricted in Seele Elementary School in New Braunfels, Texas in 2014.[10] In Texas, Drama has been banned for the third time in a row between 2014 and 2018. Responding to criticism, Telgemeier has said that Drama was supported by Scholastic and is the reason why she is so thankful. [13]

Common Sense Media, an independent nonprofit that rates and reviews media by age-appropriateness, has marked Drama as appropriate for readers over 14 years of age. Common Sense Media acknowledges that the depiction of homosexual relationships among teens may make readers uncomfortable but overall, Telgemeier deals with the material of the matter sensitively. [14]

Michelle Abate, an Associate Professor of Literature for Children and Young Adults at the Ohio State University, argues that the musical production of Moon over Mississippi in Drama, fails to recognize the prevalence of racism that originated in the South, but still exists today everywhere. The production itself serves as a way of romanticizing the Antebellum South and promotes the ideology of white supremacy from that era according to Abate.

In response to backlash for portraying gay characters in a children's book, Telgemeier responded by saying that when an individual is young sexuality may not play a major role in their lives, but it always remains a part of their identity and that she doesn't attempt to force her viewpoints on anyone.[2] She said that '''her goal is to promote love and friendships. She believes that interpretation will vary dependent on the person and they can determine their own viewpoints on the subjects. Otherwise, Telgemeier realizes that she cannot convince others to follow her system of beliefs and she will not let others influence her writing topics and values.'''[2]

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"Persepolis (comics)" Article Evaluation:


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * The lead section is relatively concise and provides important details
 * The individual summaries for the different editions of the book are long and contain unnecessary details
 * The amount of details in the sectional summaries confuse the readers and lose their attention
 * Many of the sentences can either be removed or combined
 * Summary of edition 2 is extremely long and must be condensed
 * contain unnecessary details
 * Some of the quotations are not needed and can be paraphrased
 * In the evaluating book articles page provided by wikipedia it does not include a list of characters section for books
 * List of characters is extensive - if author wanted to provide character list only the main character and some smaller characters should be named
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * Does not seem out of date
 * Most of the sources are from the early 2000's
 * Still contains some sources from more recent times
 * What else could be improved?
 * The second paragraph in the background section should be moved to the reception section
 * The genre/style section should come earlier because it is confusing when the first sentence of the article is "graphic autobiography"
 * Publication history could have more important details:
 * Publisher full name
 * The specific languages translated to
 * In the genre style section: when discussing Spiegelman's graphic novel does not provide title
 * Grammar needs to be edited:
 * Genre section: "read"" is a quote within a quote and the grammar is faulty
 * Does not include definitions of some terms
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Both positions regarding controversy of novel are demonstrated
 * Relatively equally
 * Not really biased
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * The details regarding the book being challenged are more extensive than those regarding the positive reviews
 * Could include more positive claims regarding the book and novel
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * A majority of the links do work
 * Fact regarding school in California needs a citation
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * One quote is cited to 3 different sources which is confusing
 * Second fact in the overview section is not cited
 * The overview section/ the first section contains facts, but lacks citations
 * What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * Discussing whether or not it can be labeled as graphic novel
 * Some of the complaints regarding the summaries also
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?
 * We discussed more of the controversy
 * We did not go into extreme detail about the summaries
 * We also did not talk about all of the characters listed

"A Wrinkle in Time (2018 Film)" Structure Evaluation:


 * Lead Section:
 * relatively concise
 * covers a short summary about what will be discussed in article like it is supposed to
 * describes how much it made domestically and overseas
 * easy to follow
 * gives some background while summarizing article
 * slightly longer than necessary and repeating details that are addressed earlier
 * Plot Synopsis:
 * does not add any analysis, judgements or interpretations
 * limited to a few paragraphs-
 * still relatively lengthy, however it is easy to follow and incorporates key ideas
 * not sure if this is exactly the plot of the movie, but it is mainly the same plot as the book
 * Cast:
 * addresses all characters mentioned in above summary
 * which incorporates only the main characters of the plot
 * does include some of the "unimportant" characters ("Elegant man" "Comaztoz Woman")
 * Production:
 * easier to read because there are subsections to organize all of the questions necessary to be addressed
 * details regarding other films that Disney has produced are a good comparison, but more than two comparisons are not needed
 * answers all questions in the recommendation sheet
 * Release:
 * becomes subsection in previous section
 * only two sentences
 * does not address all questions from this section
 * Reception:
 * nicely organized based on questions and making them into clear subsections
 * provides a balanced reception of the film
 * positive responses vs negative responses
 * answers necessary questions for this section
 * also includes reviews from "Rotten Tomatoes" which is suggested against
 * Critical response a bit hard to follow with multiple paragraphs
 * Does not contain "others, categories, or infobox" section
 * Could include these sections by moving information around like removing it from lead section and developing it in one of the aforementioned labels
 * Does suggest other articles to consider
 * Possible Source to add:
 * "Storm Reid Says Making 'A Wrinkle In Time' Was 'A Dream Come True'." All Things Considered, 9 Mar. 2018. Literature Resource Center, http://link.galegroup.com/apps/doc/A530684430/LitRC?u=wash43584&sid=LitRC&xid=a829a0c3 . Accessed 9 Oct. 2018.
 * Interview with one of the main actors
 * Gives more personal touch
 * Not sure if it could be used in the article

"Indigenous Peoples' Day" Article Evaluation:


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * The article is relatively short and concise which allows the reader to stay focused.
 * The article focuses strictly on the topic which keeps the intention clear.
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * Most of the information was up to date.
 * A few of my edits were to support the facts and claims made according to their years.
 * What else could be improved?
 * There could be an additional section about the controversy regarding the change of Columbus day.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * This article is neutral.
 * It simply states the facts regarding the celebration and the meaning behind it.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * There are not viewpoints really since it is just proposing the fact of the holiday.
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * There could have been additional citations to make the article stronger (which is where I edited most).
 * Citation 31 confused me since it was from 2017, but the fact was claiming that the day was introduced to Berkley in 1992.
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * No real bias within in the sources.
 * One citation is made in the last line of the first paragraph from the "Celebrations" section, which says "Citation needed" and then a following citation saying "where."'
 * This confused me and made the article less professional.
 * What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * The talk page mainly consists of more articles supporting the idea that many cities and states are changing Columbus day to Indigenous Peoples' Day.
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?
 * We have not really discussed Indigenous Peoples' Day.
 * Columbus Day we have talked about the controversy regarding the holiday.

"Native American mascot controversy" Article Evaluation:


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * For the most part the article described the controversy regarding Native American culture being used as mascots.
 * Stayed on track and was organized in the sense that there were main sections with various subsections that were clearly labeled.
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * A lot of the examples regarding the controversy were given from the 1900s.
 * There were a few points that were made that occurred in the 2010s.
 * A few more experiences that happened recently would make the article stronger.
 * What else could be improved?
 * The sentence structure could be edited since many of the sentences are run-ons.
 * More examples regarding the opposite side (supporting the idea of having these mascots).
 * Being more specific in the sense that it is not just Native Americans that are mascots but rather specific parts of their culture
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Most of the article is about the opposition of using Native American culture as mascots
 * The section regarding the support of the mascots is limited
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * The viewpoint that Native American mascots is racist and stereotypical is overrepresented
 * The argument that the mascots are not offensive is underrepresented
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * Most of the citations work.
 * The citations are used appropriately and properly.
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * A majority of the sources that I looked at were reliable
 * American Psychological Association
 * New York Times
 * Chicago Tribune
 * Huffington Post
 * National Congress of American Indians
 * Most of the sources were neutral with the exception of a few that were biased towards one side of the argument or the other
 * The bias is not noted
 * What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * Most people discussed the length of the sentences
 * The lack of evidence towards supporting the Native American mascots
 * Heavy proof of the opposing viewpoint
 * Editing the title to be more specific since it is not just Native American individuals that are the mascots, but rather certain aspects of the culture.
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?
 * We did not specifically discuss this controversy
 * Regarding the Native American culture we discussed how they are underrepresented and students are being taught false facts regarding history
 * We talked about two different arguments to nearly every topic in class
 * How the opposers of MAS might view this article vs. the supporters

Drama (graphic novel) Article Evaluation:


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * Everything in the article revolves around the graphic novel.
 * Focused and well organized
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * Could add where it is on the list of challenged books as of 2018
 * Any updates about personal responses to the book and the meaning behind it
 * What else could be improved?
 * The summary was a bit confusing, but the character chart helped
 * Summary was also relatively long- could be cut down
 * Pictures added
 * Third night is when fiasco happens not second night in summary
 * Addition of genre and style
 * More themes could be discussed
 * More specific and clear
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Seems relatively neutral
 * However the section titled "Portrayal of Hegemonic Masculinity," seems a bit biased
 * Although it is not the author of the article's opinion
 * Providing this information creates a bias since they do not discuss the stereotypes about females throughout the novel
 * Only stating Berland's argument
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Controversy section is longer than awards section, but that might be a fact that the controversy is more prevalent than the praise
 * Also, the article highlights many of the negative aspects of the novel as opposed to the positives
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * All of the links work
 * Sources cited properly with the facts
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * Most are reliable neutral sources
 * No bias was noted on any sources
 * What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * Someone suggested adding pictures which I strongly support
 * Was going to suggest that as well
 * Makes it easier to understand
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?
 * In class we discussed our personal opinions of the book
 * No opinions were clearly stated in the article
 * We talked about the positive and negative angles of it being a graphic novel
 * Wikipedia does not discuss it as a graphic novel
 * Class explained more themes that occurred
 * Article only proposes two themes