User:Jdoriscar/Glossophobia/Daisydriftwood Peer Review

Peer review
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General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Jdoriscar, Rmalexandre
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Rmalexandre/sandbox

Content evaluation
The added section of Education is relevant to the topic of this article. Everything presented fit well together to make a consistent and logical text.

Tone and balance evaluation
The added section of Education was written using neutral and unbiased language. But I notice that there is a sentece where you said: "The information we have acquired lets us know xxx" - I was just wondering if this should be rephrased to avoid using subjective language.

Sources and references evaluation
I think it'd be better if you could include the references in the text that you were editing directly, instead of just keeping the references in a separate sandbox where you had your bibliography. Overall, the sources used are relevant to the topic and are all secondary sources of information written by various authors. However, some articles may not be that current, that it, they may be from the early 1990s. So, I suggest you may want to update the sources a little bit.

Organization evaluation
On the whole, the section was well organized, making the flow easy to be followed. I like it how you would make a claim, then provide an explanation for that (even though I am not sure whether or not the explanations were drawn from a cited source). The information was presented in a concise and clear way. However, there are some grammatical errors (last sentence) and some odd capitalization in the middle of a sentence that would need to be revised.

Overall evaluation
I think adding this section of Education would definitely add more value to this Wiki article as if offers a new perspective that has yet to be looked at in the current version of the article. You have provided valuable and relevant information for the topic. Nevertheless, as I mentioned earlier, there's room for improvements still (i.e. The currency of cited sources).