User:JeaneKinopio/SCALE-UP/Mkretzsch Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JeaneKinopio


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * I looked at Jeane's Sandbox page in particular. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JeaneKinopio/SCALE-UP?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * SCALE-UP

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

There is no lead section because the article is so short. This seems appropriate.

Since SCALE-UP appears to be an acronym, the meaning of it should be explained in the first or second sentence.

The first paragraph of the edited version in the sandbox uses a more encyclopedic tone than the published version. I would recommend rewording "Research shows..." at the start of the third sentence because this isn't common Wikipedia language and the sentence maybe shows bias towards the "good-ness" of the concept.

I recommend removing the sentence "Information about more than 400 of these implementation sites is available on the SCALE-UP website" because I think it's a violation of one or more of the "multiple issues" flagged at the top of the article.

(In the published version) There are a lot of pictures for such a short article which is great for understanding the concept. The picture captioned "A 99-seat room at NCSU" is misplaced compared to the others.

Possible additional paragraphs or sections could include: an explanation of what students in a SCALE-UP classroom do during a given lesson, who coined the term, how the concept spread out of North Carolina, a list of necessary components to be considered a SCALE-UP classroom, comments on the scalability of such an environment, applications for use outside of post-secondary learning (if that exists).

Looks like good steps in the right direction!