User:Jed5z/The Hole (2014 book)/Ssr13 Peer Review

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Jed5z, Rnh3u, SammyD621


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 * User:Jed5z/The Hole (2014 book)


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Evaluate the drafted changes
Really great work so far! You've written an article that made me want to read the book which is awesome! I had a couple of thoughts and some minor grammar catches. First off, I wonder if Plot and Main Characters should be their own sections. To me plot and synopsis are the same thing, so it seems a little redundant to have a plot section under synopsis. The plot section is written very clearly and left me without any questions regarding the story line. One thing that I caught was that a lot of the sentences open with "She does this. She does that." I would try to vary sentence structure a little bit to have less sentences start the exact same way. In the 4th paragraph of the summary, I would and a comma to make it say, "She agrees, and after an awkward..." since it's a compound sentence. In the first sentence of the 7th paragraph, I think you change verb tenses. Change it to "has" and "waters" for it to match the rest of the summary. Under your themes section, I think it sould be "Society's" instead of "societies" (unless I'm reading it wrong). I had a couple of things regarding the quote under the reception section. Firstly, are direct quotes allowed in wikipedia articles? I thought I read that they weren't, but I could be wrong so double check me. If you are allowed to use it, The Hole inside the quote should be itallicized instead of having quotation marks. Also "strage" should have single quotation marks, not double. Did any of your sources have a summary of the plot? If so, I would add a couple of citations to your plot section. Your main character section is very well cited, great job! We struggled with that a little bit. I checked some of your links, and they are all working! That's really all the feedback I had. The writing style is clear, neutral, and consistent throughout. It's well organized and well supported. You guys are off to a really great start! Let me know if you have any questions or would like elaboration on anything I said. ~Sydney