User:Jeffdnguyen921/Social studies/LycheeJelly1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Jeffdnguyen921


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jeffdnguyen921/Social studies


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Social studies

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead remains strong, and is more concise given the emphasis on history. There is a consistent neutral tone throughout the article, and citations are strong. In regards to the ten themes of Social Studies, I would recommend either a shorter summary without subheading, or greater emphasis to explain each of the ten points. The information is factual, but if each of the points is only a sentence it may be more fitting to summarize in a paragraph. Seeing as these ten points are the definition of Social Studies I would recommend giving more information to less, as it may seem peculiar to give such an extensive history section with only a sentence for each of the ten aspects of Social Studies.

I hope this helps!

LycheeJelly1 (talk) 07:26, 1 February 2021 (UTC)