User:Jeffrie w/Use of social media in the Wisconsin protests/Eungjeonglee Peer Review

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Jeffrie w


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 * Use of social media in the Wisconsin protests

Evaluate the drafted changes
Everything is relevant to the topic itself in the edited article. The structure of the two major edits--Background and The protest movement's spread through social media--is proportionate and precise. The Background section is concise and the "The protest movement's spread through social media" section is detailed and developed.

One component done particularly well is the sufficiently-sourced citations. Every claim and factual statement are supported by an in-text citation. And all the links of the sources are functional and easily accessible. The employed sources are all up-to-date.

The paraphrasing of the article is also sufficiently well done, quoting the editor: "Ian's Pizza is currently using both Twitter and Facebook to promote their donations," whereas the original excerpt states: "Ian's Pizza, used Facebook and Twitter to raise awareness and donations..." It is understandable to have matching phrases from the sources as it is inevitable to utilize specific wordings. A suggestion is to phrase, "The news also played a critical role in driving support for the protests on social media," from the article draft with a less opinionated tone--maybe something similar to : "Furthermore, the news partakes in driving support for the protests on social media,"

Overall, the editing of the draft is encyclopedic, resourceful, clear, and concise. Well done!