User:Jemanly/Early childhood education/Sam.canaz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

jemanly


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jemanly/Early_childhood_education?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Early childhood education

Evaluate the drafted changes
Both additions to this article have very strong leads and well written topic sentences that accurately introduce the topic at hand. Content is relevant to the topics and adds important information to the article. Content is not biased and is very factual. The only thing I would reevaluate is the grammar in some sections. For example, I think a comma should be added in the quote "play is the highest expression of human development in childhood for it alone is the free expression of what is in the child’s soul." between childhood and for. In the next sentence a think "a" should be added before teacher to make the sentence flow better. In the last sentence, reword the part 'such as completely tasks independent' to maybe completing tasks independently. Overall, very well written and informative.