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I choose to add/revised to the Article: National Minimum Drinking Age Act

I plan on editing and adding some information in the “Effect of Legislation” section of this article.

This section of this article needs some expansion and has some possible biased information that needs to be edited or removed.

In your sandbox, write a few sentences about what you plan to contribute to the selected article. Think back to when you did an article critique. What can you add? Post some of your ideas to the article's talk page.


 * I plan to add some new/updated/relevant and reliable research to – National Minimum Drinking Age Act, specifically the “Effect    of Legislation” section.
 * I feel that this section is lacking information and has some neutrality issues.
 * Maybe some verbiage editing
 * Add citations

ARTICLE REVIEW- I choose to review; National Minimum Drinking Age Act Article

 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * Most everything I read was relevant to the article topic. But towards the bottom there was a section labeled "Effect of the Legislation" that didn't seem to have anything to do with Legislation but instead stated the stats on how raising the minimum drinking age helps save lives. This particular section also has a box that is labeled "This section has multiple issues".
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? This article seemed to be mixed with unbiased and bias opinions. I think referencing MADD makes this article biased.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? To me this article is a hot mess, all over the board with no clear direction.
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article? I checked several citations and many were not working or the links would not load. There were 30 listed but I could tell that many of the citations were not highlighted for me to even be able to click on them.
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? No     Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources?        If biased, is that bias noted? Several biased opinions I believe were in the article but no noted.
 * Several of the facts are missing references and many of the sources are from news links such as CNN, The New York Post, The New York Times, NBC News and the Washington Times to name a few. All in my opinion are biased sources.
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added? The article needs more relevant statistics from reliable sources.
 * Check out the Talk page of the article. What kinds of conversations,       if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic? There has been some input into this article but not much and hardly much interest for quite some time. The last update was in July of 2016.
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects? This article was apart of a Wiki Education foundation or project.
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class? To me there seems to be way too many topics in this article that do not all flow well together.

Rough Draft- Adding/editing the Effects of Legislation section in the "National Minimum Drinking Age Act" article
The section of the article is missing citations and statistics to support the effects of legislation. There is also neutrality issues.

I plan on adding this to the article:
According to the U.S. Department of Transportation raising the MLDA act of 1984 has reduced alcohol related vehicle fatalities. States that reduced the BAC to 0.00 saw a reduction in fatal vehicle crashes of 22%. And states that reduced the BAC to 0.02 had a 17% reduction in fatal crashes. The states that reduced the BAC from 0.04 to 0.06 had no reported changes in vehicle fatalities.