User:Jenguyen/sandbox

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Proposed Changes

Currently, the article reads:

"For Bipolar I Disorder 296.40 Most Recent Episode Hypomanic and 296.4x Most Recent Episode Manic, the proposed revision includes the following specifiers: with Psychotic Features, with Mixed Features, with Catatonic Features, with Rapid Cycling, with Anxiety (mild to severe), with Suicide Risk Severity, with Seasonal Pattern, and with Postpartum Onset. Bipolar I Disorder 296.5x Most Recent Episode Depressed will include all of the above specifiers plus the following: with Melancholic Features and with Atypical Features. The categories for specifiers will be removed in DSM-5 and part A will add “or there are at least 3 symptoms of Major Depression of which one of the symptoms is depressed mood or anhedonia. For Bipolar I Disorder 296.7 Most Recent Episode Unspecified, the listed specifiers will be removed."

My proposed change:

"''For Bipolar I Disorder 296.40 (most recent episode hypomanic) and 296.4x (most recent episode manic), the proposed revision includes the following specifiers: with psychotic features, with mixed features, with catatonic features, with rapid cycling, with anxiety (mild to severe), with suicide risk severity, with seasonal pattern, and with postpartum onset. Bipolar I Disorder 296.5x (most recent episode depressed) will include all of the above specifiers plus the following: with melancholic features and with atypical features. The categories for specifiers will be removed in DSM-5 and criterion A will add “or there are at least 3 symptoms of major depression of which one of the symptoms is depressed mood or anhedonia. For Bipolar I Disorder 296.7 (most recent episode unspecified), the listed specifiers will be removed."''

'''- clear and to the point. Well done. RREIDCAF'''

 Final Feedback: 

- Simply written and clear.

- terms properly wiki-linked

- no issues with people-first language.

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Rationale for Proposed Change

I propose these changes to this paragraph in order to make these sentence more coherent and comprehensible to non-medical readers. By including links to specific terminology, readers can easily understand what symptoms are required in order to diagnose these different subsections of Bipolar I Disorder. Since, we are comparing the diagnostic criteria of bipolar I in the DSM-IV and DSM-V, I think it is necessary to specifically identify what the changes are to DSM-V. This change will be useful for patients to understand what symptoms and events must occur in order to rule in Bipolar I Disorder as a diagnosis.

'''-      I feel that it looks much better with your changes, and although they appear minor must have actually taken you quite some time to place all the links. One thing you could do, is change where it says 'part A' to 'criterion A' which I believe someone else in your group is doing, but I haven't yet provided feedback for them if they are. Can wait till it's posted to the talk page. The only other thing to watch for is if the links you have provided were already previously linked on the wikipedia page, but you don't have to change that now. RREIDCAF'''

 Final Feedback 

'''- I appreciate you responding to my feedback as given. -RREIDCAF'''

Critique of Source

The paragraph is cited with the DSM-5 from the American Psychological Association, which is considered a reputable source in North American institutions, but often contrasted with the World Health Organization's ICD-10 and ICD-11. However, there is public controversy regarding the DSM. Some opinions are that the diagnostic thresholds have been lowered, which has made it easier to diagnose a person with a mental disorder. Many speculate that this is probably one of the reasons why the rate of diagnoses of patients with mental illness is increasing. Furthermore, the validity of the DSM is commonly brought into question. Many say that the DSM itself is too arbitrary and not objective, but rather was created through clinical consensus and voting. Another concern is that the DSM fails to recognize the sociocultural causes of suffering, such as trauma, which have a clear impact on one's mental health.

'''- As you have combined Q3 and 4 of the assignment #3, I would maybe broaden why the validity of the DSM-5 has been brought into question. It sounds like you're about to discuss it, but maybe left it out? I would maybe add to your first sentence 'which is considered a reputable source in North American institutions, but often contrasted with the ICD-10/11.' Hope that makes sense, I'm not looking for a lot more, but just maybe finish the thought on the validity of the DSM-5. -RREIDCAF'''

 Final Feedback 

- Controversy discussed.

- validity and potential bias addressed

- How the DSM is created discussed in detail.

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