User:Jenkennings/Khan Murjan/Mesopotamianqueen Peer Review

General info
Jenkennings
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://dashboard.wikiedu.org/courses/University_of_Pennsylvania/The_Middle_East_through_Many_Lenses_(Fall_2023)/articles/edited?showArticle=581856572
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead: Good, concise lead; the addition of the name of the person who built it is an important addition. Perhaps you should have made that addition in the second sentence and made the first sentence more of an exciting hook, such as mentioning it as a "notable piece of architecture" earlier instead of later.

Content: Your explanation of the word khan adds useful clarification for readers. Your mentioning of the Islamic calligraphy on the outside is also relevant, but you should have inserted that addition with more flow since the sentence seems slightly interruptive. Same goes with your explanation about the museum in the final paragraph under "History."

Tone and Balance: You have great tone in this article, and you have contributed nothing but factual and neutral information about the topic, even when controversial figures such as Saddam Hussein appeared.