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Practice Editing Here (Nov 23rd in-class Wiki session work)

 * This is a place to practice clicking the "edit" button and practice adding references (via the citation button).
 * Amyloidosis
 * https://doi.org/10.1186/s12872-018-0952-8

Assignment # 3

 * Note: You will be emailing your assignment # 3 directly to your tutor, however, please paste a version here that excludes your personal information. This will allow us to support your efforts on Wikipedia prior to editing "live" in the article.
 * Proposed Changes: Section: Signs and Symptoms – Heart  Add in at the end:  Cardiac amyloidosis can present as symptoms of heart failure including shortness of breath, fatigue, and edema . As cardiac amyloidosis progresses, the amyloid deposition can affect the heart’s ability to pump and fill blood as well as its ability to maintain normal rhythm, which leads to worsening heart function and decline in people’s quality of life .  Rationale for Proposed Change:  In the Signs and Symptoms – Heart section of the Wikipedia page, the physiology behind how amyloidosis impacts the heart is explained as well as how a physician may be able to diagnose it through cardiology tests. However, it does not include symptoms that a patient may experience and be able to recognize in themselves. In order to make the Wikipedia page understandable and free of medical jargon, I proposed to include cardiovascular symptoms that a person with amyloidosis may experience. The first sentence that I propose to add explains recognizable symptoms due to cardiac amyloidosis in people. The rationale behind adding this sentence is for people to understand what symptoms may manifest in themselves due to amyloidosis. The second sentence explains how cardiac amyloidosis progresses in the body in later stages. The rationale behind this sentence is to explain how symptoms may worsen and that people in later stages have reported quality of life declining.  The controversy with changing this section of the Wikipedia page is that many of the subheadings under the Signs and Symptoms section do not contain the same type of information. For example, the brain section includes symptoms that a patient may experience in addition to tests to diagnose. However, the liver section only includes tests and the physiology behind how amyloidosis impacts the liver. With changing the heart section, it is the first step to creating a more comprehensive Signs and Symptoms section.  Critique of Source:  The critique for this source is that the focus is on cardiac amyloidosis rather than some of the other types of amyloidosis. Therefore, when changing the Wikipedia page, I want to be sure I am clearly stating that the symptoms stated are associated with cardiac amyloidosis. However, no bias was detected from reading the systematic review.    Article Improvement:  Please see article talk page for group’s entry.  Citation Identified:  Kyriakou, P., Mouselimis, D., Tsarouchas, A., Rigopoulos, A., Bakogiannis, C., Noutsias, M., & Vassilikos, V. (2018). Diagnosis of cardiac amyloidosis: a systematic review on the role of imaging and biomarkers. BMC cardiovascular disorders, 18(1), 221. https://doi.org/10.1186/s12872-018-0952-8

What to post on the Wikipedia article talk page?

 * This will also be covered on Nov 23rd in class. Your group should use the below template to share an outline of your proposed improvements (including your new wording and citations). Article talk pages are not places to share your assignment answers. The Wikipedia community will be more interested in viewing your exact article improvement suggestions including where you plan to improve the article (which section), what wording you suggest, and the exact citation (Note: all citations must meet WP:MEDRS)
 * You will not be able to paste citations directly from your sandbox to talk pages (unless you are interested in editing/learning Wiki-code in the "source editing" mode). We suggest re-adding your citations on the talk page manually (using the cite button and populating the citation by pasting in the DOI, website, or PMID). You will have to repeat this process yet again when you edit the actual article live.
 * Talk Page Template: CARL Medical Editing Initiative/Fall 2020/Talk Page Template