User:JennaHCesar/Intuitive eating/Winnie54 Peer Review

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Jenna@JennaHCesar
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * user:JennaHCesar/Intuitive eating


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Intuitive eating

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Jenna! This is my peer review for you.

Lead

I like how you introduce intuitive eating by keeping it short and precise. It is easy to understand and structured to flow smoothly. You included a brief description of the major sections to guide readers on what to expect in this article. I like that you included only the information presented within the article.

One suggestion before the content is to create a table of contents with links that guide the readers to the subsections they are interested to learning more.

Content

The content added is relevant and up-to-date. All content is necessary and I like that you also added links to articles for readers to do further research on this topic. I really enjoyed learning about intuitive eating and the 10 principles are insightful!

Suggestions for the content: On the 10th principle, the second paragraph was repeated. As for the research, I would suggest to put bullet points for each distinct research findings or provide a brief description of the advantages and make a list of it as a short and precise sentence. Maybe also mention and place a link (if possible) on where you retrieved the information from. Maybe have a section with subheading for overweight/obese, cholesterol, eating disorder, diabetes and emotional control so that reader with a specific symptom can just focus more on that particular topic. Some paragraphs consist (-) and I am not sure if you want to keep it as it is.

Tone and Balance

Content is neutral. It is very balanced as it solely provided scientific and peer-reviewed information. You provided advantages and disadvantages and didn’t persuade readers to be in favor of one position.

Sources and References

All of your content was backed by reliable sources. Information provided accurately reflect the cited sources. The sources are recent from 2016-2022 and thorough aside from the 1st (eating pleasure) and 6th (mindful eating) as it is not primarily “intuitive eating”. All the links work and it is relevant to the article. If you need more sources, there are some in the 7th source under references that might be helpful.

Organization

It is well-written, concise and easy to read. I like that you use simple English which reduces language barrier and allowed more readers to be educated on your article. There are no spelling errors, only grammar and punctuation need to be checked on certain paragraphs. The content added was well-organized as it is broken down into sections accordingly.

Suggestion: maybe make each principle in bold font to catch reader’s attention.

Images and Media

N/A. Maybe add one image or two to show an example of intuitive eating if there are any images available as a source.

Overall Impressions

I love it. I really enjoyed reading your article and to see a huge improvement with added details from the previous article. The strengths presented: very concise and you didn’t go out of topic. It is very organized and it was easy to locate the subsections. It is simply just facts and no bias was shown. You also gathered enough sources to produce a resourceful article. The only improvement needed is in the suggestions I made for you in each category and it is optional!

Nice work and I am proud of you!