User:JennaMacG/Canadian Voice of Women for Peace/Hrutuc Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JennaMacG


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JennaMacG/Canadian_Voice_of_Women_for_Peace?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Canadian Voice of Women for Peace

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Overall, this wikipedia article is well done! You have a good first paragraph which really narrows it down and precisely explains the topic. I would say you could add some brief description of the issues you discuss later in the lead. The Content is definitely more descriptive and detailed compared to the original article. I think you could definitely add more details about their current campaigns in the article as well. The manner in which you organized the article also seemed quite effective! The paragraph on WSP and VOW has some repetition in it! Like when you say "The VOW's activism has most commonly been associated with the United States grassroots organization Women Strike for Peace (WSP)." and "Throughout the years, the Canadian Voice of Women for Peace maintained a close and influential relationship with the Women Strike for Peace". Everything seems to be cited well! Overall, the article is quite concise! It's well done! Good job! I learnt alot from it!