User:JenniferZargote/User:JenniferZargote/sandbox/Amaner222 Peer Review

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Reviewer: Eric Aman

Peer Review Lead In:

You describe what your talking about very well and the sources are very on topic. I didn't know much about this topic and it helped me get a good idea into what your topic is all about. The only changes I'd make is to delete the source citations from you sections and maybe add a couple more sentences because this is an interesting topic I want to know more about. I don't really have have any other major improvements that you could add. One thing in your article that I'm going to change in mine is that I think you had great intros you your sentences.

Article Lead:

I see that you don't have an lead in and that's fine. I didn't know I had to have one until Professor Benander talked to me about my topic. You could add one that talks about what Chicano means and what the movement was about. You also talk about the art that stemmed from the movement.

Structure:

I don't see a problem with the organization of the sections. If I had to say anything I'd just start with the movement then talk about the art that came from it. I've already said that I'd love to read more about this so I'd like to see more length in you sections but there is plenty of info to get your point across. Also nothing you have is unnecessary or off-topic. All perspectives are met and no viewpoints are left out.

Neutral Content:

You do well at just giving the facts on the topic. Everything feels neutral and like theirs been thought behind each sentence.

Reliable Sources:

It looked to me like all your sources were reliable. They were mostly from published books or from reliable journals. I'd also say you have a good amount of sources and don't rely to heavily on just a few. Also everything is linked to at least one source that you have so you don't have any unsourced statements.

Reviewer Reflection:

First thing I need to do is change the intros into my sections. I thought yours were really good examples to give me ideas. My second thing to change would be to review my sources better. I feel that I didn't do my sentences justice and need to review them. My third and final thing is I need to find more and better reliable sources. More specifically I would like to use whatever you used to find you sources from books. I saw it was a google site but I've never seen that one before.