User:JenniferZargote/User:JenniferZargote/sandbox/Kyle Uphus Peer Review

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JenniferZargote
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Peer Review Lead In

 * The article has good information about the Art Impact on the movement, and definitely has the potential to get the point across to readers.
 * I would suggest you delete the sources as you get information from them, and re-order your information so that it flows nicely, which is the most important thing you can do. I would also suggest you combine the Art Impact and Literature sections, and move the information about the movement to a lead in.

Article Lead Section

 * An effective lead in could discuss the importance of Literature and the Art Impact on the Chicano Movement as a whole, with a reference to the movement's page. Currently, it is hard to tell what the connection between your sources are, as there isn't a lot of coherence between them.

Structure

 * The Art Impact section has a theme throughout it, but organizing it in a way that moves through the information with a specific direction would make it easier to understand what all the sentences have to do with each other.
 * The Movement section gives an easy to understand, brief description of the movement, but it is not necessary when you could just link to the movement's page in the lead in.
 * The Literature section is underdeveloped, and has little impact currently, but as literature is a form of art, I see no reason why it is separated from the Art Impact section.
 * If you combine the Art Impact and Literature section, and organize it in a more coherent and directional way, it would be a lot more effective. The Movement section is not necessary, and can be discussed briefly in the Lead In instead.

Neutral Content

 * The article doesn't exactly present biased content, as it is diving into the impact of art on the Chicano Movement, and doesn't push a certain message from the art, but the Movement section states that they are oppressed and does not dive into the reasons.

Reliable Sources

 * The sources are all scholarly, with the exception of three books. The sentences derived from the three books do not present biased, or unreliable information though.

Reviewer Reflection

 * I plan to make sure my article flows nicely, and the information presented relates to the information before or after it
 * I plan to delete my sources as I get information from them
 * I plan to make sure my sections have a clear theme