User:Jentxmgtd/LinYee Yuan/Ochoajaz000 Peer Review

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 * Jentxmgtd's draft on LinYee Yuan

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Peer Review on Jentxmgtd:
 * Lead section: I don't see a draft version of the lead section, so I am unable to comment.
 * Content: The content is relevant to the topic, including some info on the artist's early life, some important career moves and events, and an award the artist won. I'd say the information is up-to-date, the most recent detail is from 2022. The lead section and education is missing information. Details on some projects/works could be added, like on the 2015 food crisis project mentioned (how did it reach the UN?) It has one sentence that reminded me of the equity gap: the detail about the Yolk magazine. I think this idea of Asian representation could definitely be expanded upon, especially since it seems the magazine is influential to the artist.
 * Tone: The content and tone of the draft is neutral. Like I said above, more info can be added about Asian representation since it's an underrepresented topic.
 * Sources: I'd say most info is backed by relevant and reliable source, although some info may be missing citations. Resources include school website, lecture video, audio interview, and journal website (pretty interesting set of resources!) The content reflects what the sources say from what I read/seen, and they're rich in information. The resources are current, all within the last approximate 8 years. Unfortunately, I searched the artist's name on the Flaxman Library website and I did not see a relevant source that my peer can use for this article. Like the other peer review, I would assume to see this artist under a book (or a similar medium) of influential Asian artists, but I had no results.
 * Organization: I'd say the information is understandable. Although, because there isn't a lot, it isn't organized yet. I did not see any grammatical or spelling errors in the draft. With more information, I'd love to see the sections filled up with even more interesting and appropriate details.
 * Media: There are no images or media. If able to, I think it'd valuable to see how the Yolk magazine influenced her with Asian representation reflected in the addition of images to the article.
 * Impressions: I think this is a great base of an article and an interesting artist! The draft definitely improved the article with fun information about the artist's important career events and early life. The lead section and education could be improved upon since the information is missing. I think context would also elevate the article since the resources are intriguing and rich.