User:Jeorgiaobrien/George John Seaton/Margo.C.45 Peer Review

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Jeorgiaobrien
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Jeorgiaobrien/George John Seaton

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Your synthesis of the articles in your bibliography is strong, you've done a good job maintaining neutrality.
 * Make sure to change all your source citations from MLA to Wikipedia format
 * Using second person to describe the conditions of Devil's Island feels stylistically a little out of place, I see what you're going for but it could be interpreted as a little biased, maybe try reducing/removing the use of 'you' in these descriptions?
 * Under section French Guiana and Time Period, "The remaining population...Indian" maybe specify if you're referring to indigenous people of the Americas or people from India. Also, under this same section, 'Napoleon the III' can just be written as 'Napoleon III,' I think.
 * Your Early Life and End of Life sections aren't done yet, so this point may be not be relevant once you finish those sections, but I don't think you need the disclaimer on the bias of the source.
 * For clarity, maybe play around with the placement of the background on Devil's Island. I'm not sure if that section should stay where it is or maybe be introduced after the Early Life section. This may be dependent on how much/what content you put in the Early Life section; just something to keep in mind!
 * Overall, this is a very strong start to an article and I think you have a lot of good ideas here! I don't see any major overarching issues with bias or formatting, just a few clarity/sourcing comments!