User:JeremyML/Hercules in ancient Rome/Camsara99 Peer Review

General info

 * User:JeremyML/sandbox

Content

 * The content you've added is very well done, you're absolutely on the right track.
 * This information is relevant to the initial wikipedia article, while still being interesting and new.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Some of the language gets a little bit shaky in regards to staying neutral

Sources and References
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 * Your sources seem good.
 * The source with a link works great.
 * There could probably be more links directly to the primary sources, most of them are translated and available online for free.

Organization

 * Well done

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * You've done a really good job with this! I only had a few specific suggestions which I'll copy and past in below!
 * The comparisons between Hannibal and Hercules must have been apparent to all educated sources at the time due to its mention from primary sources[2]. - Not neutral, try to stick more to “Primary sources often make comparisons between Hercules and Hannibal”. Try to remove any language that is not stating plain and neutral fact
 * Propertius, whom in his poem 4.9 also mentions similar information as Macrobius. This is evidence that he was also using Varro as a source[3] - These sentences are just a bit choppy and could use some revising
 * According to Livy (9.44.16) - You could just link to the section of Livy’s writing that you quoted.