User:Jeslyndv/Workplace wellness/Cheynehoke Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jeslyndv


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jeslyndv/Workplace_wellness?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Workplace wellness

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: I think you could create an introductory sentence to clarify what you will be talking about in this section and how it relates to workplace wellness.

"Sixty percent of American obtain their insurance coverage solely in the their respective workspaces" (Americans)

"However, larger companies are more inclined to offer employee health insurance and wellness programs than those in small business." (smaller businesses)

"The role of the Affordable Care Act increases programs for worksite wellness is a strategy to tackle the growing rate of chronic diseases in the United States." (confusing sentence maybe rewrite? maybe remove 'the role')

* For the studies that you report, as a reader, I really like seeing the year the study was conducted it because it helps me identify when in history these thoughts or ideas came to be*

"Over the decade, it is seen as workers age, health care costs and chronic diseases such as depression, anxiety and diabetes are proportional to its growing increase." (which decade? maybe just begin the sentence with 'As workers age,..."

"Over the decade, it is seen as workers age, health care costs and chronic diseases such as depression, anxiety and diabetes are proportional to its growing increase. Due to this increase, the negative effect on workplace productivity and presentism is declining. Included in the act, are chronic diseases management to be offered in the essential health benefits. "

(Overall this section is slightly confusing because first you talk about healthcare costs growing, then the negative effects, then move onto a different topic about what is covered in the act. I think these ideas should be split up more appropriately.

"Small employers often are underrepresented in the surveys and data for ACA, low wage industries in the past have been underrepresented under the Affordable Care Act, however, with improvements in representation to cover both low and high earning workers, more participation can be seen in workplace health promotion.  "

I think you only need to cite once here! (if its the same citation)

Overall this was a very interesting and well-written article. Your work is concise and has a neutral tone. I think there are some sentences that need to be moved to other areas of the article so that the ideas can flow more smoothly.