User:Jessica1419/Salt Springs (Syracuse, New York)/Mediamademecrazy Peer Review

General info
Jessica & Xinyu
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jessica1419/Salt Springs (Syracuse, New York):
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Salt Springs, Syracuse

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects:

Lead

Guiding questions:

Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?

YES

Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?

YES, BUT I think that it is a bit specific. I would recommend that the lead be more general, then the second and third paragraphs of the lead talk about…

Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?

Not yet!