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Source

https://www.academia.edu/35544294/_1181159007_The_Many_Deaths_of_Tsar_Nicholas_II-Relics_remains_and_the_Romanovs.-_Routledge.pdf

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Paraphrasing

Around midnight on July 17th 1918, the commandant ordered the doctor to awaken the Romanov family. They did not come down the stairs until around 2 a.m. since they were accustomed to making people wait. The Commandant appeared edgy since he was short on time and eventually had to deal with the bodies. The doctor was mislead with a fable about a shooting nearby and the royal family would be safer downstairs. They were instructed to bring nothing with them however, they they came in their special clothes with multiple bags and cushions in hopes for a rescue attempt.

Before beginning the operation, the truck to transport their bodies needed to arrive. The Ermakov driver was two hours late and drunk (although not noticed until later). Each Bolshevik was assigned a prisoner since the Commandant believed it to be the most efficient way. They argued over who would shoot the former Czar and after pulling rank, the Commandant won the privilege.

There was a major problem with the plan before they even began. When the Bolsheviks entered the room, they were not properly aligned with their corresponding targets since the Romanovs were permitted to sit wherever they pleased. The Commandant proceeded to step out,pullout a piece of paper that he had been working on earlier that day, and read the decree that the Royal Family were to be executed immediately. Until that moment, they had no idea that their death would be so soon. The former Czar in shock turned to his wife the the commandant. He managed to ask "what?" twice before everyone began to shoot at him.

The shootings quickly became chaotic with the Bolsheviks firing at random. The girls tried to run away, banged on the door, and screamed for help.The sound of screaming and flying bullets filled the room along with smoke. The Commandant ordered the soldiers to cease fire in order to see the outcome.

Two of the girls had their arms around their heads as they crouched by the side wall. The boy was sitting on the chair shaking and crying. He had urinated during the shooting and the liquid could be seen mixing with his mother's blood.

Wenqi's Feedback
I wonder if the above is your draft writing. Are you going to move the above to your Wikipedia article? I don't think so. I didn't see your draft writing.

== Logan's Feedback: The source you used is very reliable. The paraphrase was pretty spot on and the wording and sentence structure was implemented very well. Everything was comprehensive and easy to understand. The additions are appropriate and it flows well. ==

Linaya's feedback
This information is more of a revison plan than a summary of the House of Romanov. I would add more specific information and be sure not to plagiarize when adding the texts to the Wikipedia article