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BRUCE EDITS PT 2

I am submitting a few small edits to help update the page on behalf of Bruce Mau, as a part of my work for Freeman with Golin (formerly Golin Harris). I am happy to update the page with any approved edits once an editor without a COI has reviewed them and provided feedback, if it is easier for the editor. Please let me know if there are any questions or concerns about any of the requested edits provided below. Thanks in advance for the help!


 * 1. Update the information box template. The template currently in use is "architect", but this is dated information. A request to update his occupation to "Designer, Chief Design Officer of Freeman" was approved by an editor without a COI, but because this requires changing the template of the information box I wanted to run this by another editor before making the change. Suggested new template is provided.


 * 2. Update Mau's birth city in both the information box and in the first paragraph of the "Life and Career" section to simply say "Ontario, Canada". My work with Freeman has allowed me to hear directly from Bruce and his team that "Sudbury" is not correct (he was actually born in Pembroke), but unfortunately we cannot find any sources to prove this. Is it possible to just remove the specific city and it leave it a little more general with just Ontario, Canada?


 * 3. Remove "Institute without Boundaries" from the information box. While Mau helped found Institute without Boundaries, he is no longer with them. The source provided below discusses how Institute Without Boundaries moved from the Bruce Mau Designs Studio into a new space and hired its own dedicated staff under the leadership of the Director the School of Design at George Brown College.


 * Source 1: http://institutewithoutboundaries.ca/about-us/history/


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QUANTUM

I am submitting additional sources to help clean up the page as part of my work with Golin for Quantum Corporation. Much of the information on the page missing sources is quite old, so sources were hard to come by. I believe that the below sources are reliable sources, but hope to have an editor without a COI review. I am happy to add any approved sources to the page once an editor without at COI has reviewed them and provided feedback, if it is easier for the editor. Please let me know if there are any questions or concerns about any of the citations provided below. Thanks in advance for the help!


 * 1. Hard Disk Products 1980-2001


 * Source: http://corphist.computerhistory.org/corphist/view.php?s=stories&id=83


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 * 2. Early Products Section


 * Q500 Source: http://corphist.computerhistory.org/corphist/documents/doc-43a71f2dafbd5.pdf


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 * Plus Hardcard Source 1: http://pcmuseum.ca/details.asp?id=224&type=Peripheral


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 * Plus Hardcard Source 2: https://books.google.com/books?id=hC8EAAAAMBAJ&printsec=frontcover&lr=#v=onepage&q=quantum&f=false


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 * Q280 Source: http://corphist.computerhistory.org/corphist/documents/doc-452b370dba420.pdf


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 * ProDrive Source: http://www.minuszerodegrees.net/manuals/Quantum/Quantum%20ProDrive%2040AT%20and%2080AT%20-%20Installation%20Manual.pdf


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 * 3. Optical assist technology


 * Source 1: http://bitsavers.trailing-edge.com/pdf/quantum/brochures/Q2000_Brochure_1984.pdf


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 * Source 2: https://books.google.com/books?id=1T0EAAAAMBAJ&pg=PA29&lpg=PA29&dq=quantum+introduces+prodrive&source=bl&ots=xpm_HtWg3J&sig=ANjmSq6krv24OqI-BKh4bwK-VTI&hl=en&sa=X&ved=0ahUKEwiilcfRx-bRAhVG8GMKHUA6CP4Q6AEIGjAA#v=onepage&q=quantum&f=false


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 * 4. Bigfoot


 * Source 1: https://web.archive.org/web/19970713072452/http://www.quantum.com/src/whitepapers/big_paper/BigPaper.htm


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 * Source 2: https://books.google.com/books?id=-p0J8W4KrksC&pg=PA56#v=onepage&q=quantum&f=false


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 * Source 3: https://books.google.com/books?id=y-hfa6YSVFAC&pg=PA37#v=onepage&q=quantum%20bigfoot&f=false


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 * 5. DEC Storage group acquisition


 * Source 1: http://www.magnext.com/partnerspotlight/quantum


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 * Source 2: http://www.company-histories.com/Quantum-Corporation-Company-History.html


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I am submitting a request for edits on behalf of Bruce Mau as part of my work with Freeman for Golin (formerly GolinHarris). The requested edits, enclosed in the collapsible box below, propose several changes and updates to the information box, introduction and Life and career sections of the article. Please let me know if there are any edits or issues with the requested edits below. I am happy to make updates to the requests, find additional sources, and whatever else may be needed to help make the process as simple as possible for an editor willing to assist me. If the edits are approved, I am happy to make changes under the supervision and guidance of a Wikipedia editor who does not have a COI, if this is what the editor would prefer. Thanks in advance for the help!


 * 1. Information box: Mau's occupation information is outdated.


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 * Source 1: http://www.pcmaconvene.org/design/design-thinking-on-exhibit/


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 * Source 2: https://skift.com/2016/06/08/cmos-are-investing-more-in-live-events-to-engage-distracted-audiences/


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 * 2. Information Box: The Global Creative Leadership Award is not the correct name of the award.


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 * Source: http://www.creativeleadershipsummit.org/previous-blouin-foundation-award-honorees


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 * 3. Information Box: Bruce Mau has been awarded more awards than those listed. Add the two additional awards, listed below.


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 * Source 1 (Philadelphia Museum of Art Award): http://www.newsworks.org/index.php/local/arts-culture/88439-philly-art-museum-recognizes-bruce-mau-visionary-designer-of-ideas


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 * Source 2 (Philadelphia Museum of Art Award): http://www.philamuseum.org/collab/


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 * Source 3 (Cooper Hewitt Award): http://www.nytimes.com/2016/05/05/style/national-design-awards-2016.html?_r=2


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 * Source 4 (Cooper Hewitt Award): http://www.cooperhewitt.org/national-design-awards/2016-national-design-awards-winners/


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 * 4. Information Box: The Practice section is outdated. Bruce now works with Freeman as well.


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 * Source 1: http://www.pcmaconvene.org/design/design-thinking-on-exhibit/


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 * Source 2: https://skift.com/2016/06/08/cmos-are-investing-more-in-live-events-to-engage-distracted-audiences/


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 * 5. Information Box: The projects section does not include many of the projects Bruce has worked on. I understand if this is too many to include in this section, as I'm not sure what the appropriate number to include is. However, listed below are several other projects Mau has been a part of.


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 * Source 1 (Mentions Coca-Cola, McDonald's, Herman Miller, Guatemala): http://www.exhibitionworld.co.uk/2016/01/17/freeman-appoints-coca-cola-mcdonalds-designer/


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 * Source 2 (Walt Disney Concert Hall, Arizona State University and New Meadowlands Stadium): https://www.entrepreneur.com/article/219487


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 * Source 3 (Walt Disney Concert Hall, Getty Research Institute, Gagosian Gallery): http://bombmagazine.org/article/2732/bruce-mau


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 * Source 4 (Indigo Books, Walt Disney Concert Hall): http://www.nytimes.com/2004/06/04/business/media-business-advertising-acquisitive-mdc-partners-expands-again-this-time.html


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 * 6. Introduction: The introductory paragraph reads a little confusing. We suggest reworking it, so that the general information comes first, followed by paragraphs that highlight his major accomplishments. Additionally, this edit adds a sentence about his work with Freeman, which began in 2015.


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 * Source 1 (Institute Without Boundaries founding date and collaboration with School of Design at George Brown College): http://www.theglobeandmail.com/report-on-business/small-business/sb-managing/bruce-mau-uses-design-to-create-positive-change/article4315015/


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 * Source 2 (Co-founding Massive Change Network with Bisi Williams): https://www.entrepreneur.com/article/219487


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 * Source 3 (Co-founding Massive Change Network with Bisi Williams): http://www.chicagotribune.com/bluesky/originals/chi-bruce-mau-design-innovation-bsi-story.html


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 * Source 4 (Work with Freeman): http://www.pcmaconvene.org/design/design-thinking-on-exhibit/


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 * Source 5 (work with Freeman): https://skift.com/2016/06/08/cmos-are-investing-more-in-live-events-to-engage-distracted-audiences/


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 * 7. Life and career: The paragraph about his work with Freeman does not expand upon what he does for the company.


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 * Source 1 (Work with Freeman): http://www.pcmaconvene.org/design/design-thinking-on-exhibit/


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 * Source 2: https://skift.com/2016/06/08/cmos-are-investing-more-in-live-events-to-engage-distracted-audiences/


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 * 8. Life and career: The section does not include anything about how Bruce was recognized by the Philadelphia Museum of Art with the Design Excellence Award.


 * Between the paragraph about Freeman and the paragraph about the 2016 Cooper Hewitt Award, add the following sentence as it's own paragraph:


 * Source: https://www.design.upenn.edu/pennpraxis/work/designing-future-bruce-mau


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 * 9. Life and career: The date Massive Change Network was founded is incorrect. It was founded in 2010, not 2009.


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 * Source: http://gdusa.com/news/bruce-mau-exhibited-and-honored-by-philadelphia-museum-of-art


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 * 10. Life and career: There is information available about the clients and projects Bruce Mau has worked on that is not included here.


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 * Source 1 (Mentions Coca-Cola, McDonald's, Herman Miller, MoMA, Guatemala, Denmark, Saudi Arabia, Frank Gehry, Rem Koolhaas): http://www.exhibitionworld.co.uk/2016/01/17/freeman-appoints-coca-cola-mcdonalds-designer/


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 * Source 2 (Walt Disney Concert Hall, Arizona State University and New Meadowlands Stadium): https://www.entrepreneur.com/article/219487


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 * Source 3 (Walt Disney Concert Hall, Gagosian Gallery, Seattle Public Library): http://bombmagazine.org/article/2732/bruce-mau


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 * Source 4 (Indigo Books, Walt Disney Concert Hall): http://www.nytimes.com/2004/06/04/business/media-business-advertising-acquisitive-mdc-partners-expands-again-this-time.html


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 * 11. Life and career: There is information available about Bruce Mau's various speaking engagements that is not included here.


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 * Source 1 (Ohio State lecture): http://knowlton.osu.edu/event/bruce-mau-1


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 * Source 2 (Harvard): http://harvardmagazine.com/2012/05/bruce-mau-design-school-class-day


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 * Source 3 (Rhode Island School of Design speech): http://www.risd.edu/press-releases/2014/Bruce-Mau-to-Deliver-Keynote-Address-at-Rhode-Island-School-of-Design%E2%80%99s-2014-Commencement/


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I am submitting multiple requests for edits on behalf of Quantum Corporation as part of my work for Golin (formerly GolinHarris). In an effort to make the requested edits as clear as possible, I have broken them out by section. This request proposes several changes to the information box and introduction to the article. Please let me know if there are any edits or issues with the requested edits below. Thanks in advance for the help!


 * 1. Information box: The products section is outdated.


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 * Source 1: http://data-storage-newscom.blogspot.com/2012/11/quantum-announces-new-family-of-wide.html


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 * Source 2: http://www.storagereview.com/quantum_integrates_dot_hill_into_its_tiered_storage_offerings


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 * 2. Introduction: Minor updates that include removing repetitive wording, adding updated information and breaking the paragraph into two.


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 * Source/Tag: Add the following Wikipedia page to the word "virtual" in the above introduction. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Virtualization

I am submitting multiple requests for edits on behalf of Quantum Corporation as part of my work for Golin (formerly GolinHarris). In an effort to make the requested edits as clear as possible, I have broken them out by section. This request proposes several changes to the Quantum-Maxtor Merger section of the article. Please let me know if there are any edits or issues with the requested edits below. Thanks in advance for the help!


 * 1. The name of the section suggests that all of Quantum and Maxtor merged, but this is incorrect. We are suggesting renaming the section to reflect the sale of Quantum's hard drive division to Maxtor.


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 * Source 1: http://www.computerworld.com/article/2588556/windows-pcs/maxtor-to-acquire-quantum-disk-drive-group.html


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 * Source 2: http://www.sfgate.com/business/article/Maxtor-Agrees-to-Buy-Quantum-s-Hard-Disk-Drive-2735295.php


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 * 2: The last paragraph about Quantum purchasing Meridian Data should be in the Acquisitions section as it relates more directly to Quantum's acquisitions, rather than the merger with Maxtor. The Acquisitions section is directly below this one.


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 * After: Relocate to the Acquisitions section as the first bullet. The bullet should read as follows:


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I am submitting multiple requests for edits on behalf of Quantum Corporation as part of my work for Golin (formerly GolinHarris). In an effort to make the requested edits as clear as possible, I have broken them out by section. This request proposes several changes to the Acquisitions section of the article. Please let me know if there are any edits or issues with the requested edits below. Thanks in advance for the help!


 * 1. Update the name to Acquisitions since 1994 DEC Acquisition to accurately reflect what the section talks about. The DEC acquisition is discussed in a previous section and not mentioned here.


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 * 2. There are both minor edits for grammar and readability, small corrections as well as the addition of the 1999 bullet from the Quantum-Maxtor merger section.


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 * Source: http://www.crn.com/news/storage/300073638/quantum-acquires-symform-plans-to-bring-cloud-based-backups-to-enterprise.htm


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I am submitting multiple requests for edits on behalf of Quantum Corporation as part of my work for Golin (formerly GolinHarris). In an effort to make the requested edits as clear as possible, I have broken them out by section. This request proposes several changes to the various products sections of the article. Please let me know if there are any edits or issues with the requested edits below. Thanks in advance for the help!


 * 1. Tape Storage Products 1994-Present: We're requesting adding one sentence at the end of the section that brings the section up to date.


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 * Source: http://www.prnewswire.com/news-releases/quantum-to-add-lto-7-drives-to-expansive-tiered-storage-portfolio-300142992.html


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 * 2. Disk Backup and Recovery Products 2002-Present: We're requesting adding one sentence, before the last paragraph, to help bring the section up to date.


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 * Source 1 (on the 2015 Storage Awards): http://www.storagemagazine.co.uk/storageawards/?page=winners2015


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 * Source 2 (On the 2014 Product of the Year Awards): http://searchdatabackup.techtarget.com/feature/Quantum-Corp-DXi6900-Deduplication-Appliance


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 * 3. File System and Archive Products 2006-Present: StorNext is in its fifth generation. In the third paragraph update "fourth" to "fifth".


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I am submitting multiple requests for edits on behalf of Quantum Corporation as part of my work for Golin (formerly GolinHarris). In an effort to make the requested edits as clear as possible, I have broken them out by section. This request proposes several changes to the Lattus Wide Area Storage Products 2012-Present section of the article. Please let me know if there are any edits or issues with the requested edits below. Thanks in advance for the help!


 * 1. Update the name of the section to reflect the correct name of the products.


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 * Source: http://www.quantum.com/products/bigdatamanagement/lattus/index.aspx


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 * 2. Add a sentence between the first and second paragraph to explain "wide area storage".


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 * Source: http://www.quantum.com/products/bigdatamanagement/lattus/index.aspx


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 * 3. Minor updates to the last paragraph to clarify the updated name of the product.


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