User:Jessica C918/Achievement gaps in the United States/PatrickHardner Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jessica C


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I will be utilizing the 6 questions from the previous exercise for this review. I will focus on positive feedback :)


 * 1) Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * 2) Everything appears relevant based on what I have read and what I know about achievement gaps. I like how you have many specific topics within your article (race, LGBT, etc) and I think this benefits your non-biased article in the long run. Although it is a long article, I believe every piece of information is important and I applaud you for your extensive research.
 * 3) Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * 4) Yes the article is neutral, although your opinions related to achievement gaps are clearly present. I believe you have done a great job of providing fundamental information related to this topic, while limiting your bias in an efficient way. It is difficult to do this, but I believe you have done an outstanding job. Your sources, as I will describe below, are also very well-selected and also benefit your arguments in the end, especially with respect to bias.
 * 5) Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * 6) It is difficult to eliminate bias when writing opinion-based Wikipedia articles (or any article for that matter). However, I believe you provided a very neutral understanding of this issue, while simultaneously sharing your perspectives related to achievement gaps. I believe readers will gain a non-biased understanding of achievement gaps from your piece while also constructing their own opinions which likely match yours. Great work!
 * 7) Check the citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * 8) The links work and they appear to support the claims in this article. Jessica utilized a wide variety of source types for this assignment (academic scholarship, popular press, other Wikipedia articles). With this in mind, I would argue that she has fulfilled this requirement and has non-biased sources related to achievement gaps in the United States.
 * 9) Is each fact supported by an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * 10) Yes, there is no plagiarism present based on what I have read in Jessica's article. There are many words highlighted in blue which allow the readers to find additional information where necessary. In addition to this, she often cites relevant works, as described in the previous question, which allow readers to gain better understandings of sources' arguments if they wish.
 * 11) Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that should be added?
 * 12) I believe this is a very well-written article that covers a lot of ground. There are many sections in this piece that I would never have thought of including; therefore, I cannot think of anything else to add. However, I am not as familiar with this issue (as this is not my topic and; therefore, I have not read as much about it). Perhaps you will add more sections throughout the remainder of the semester. If so, I look forward to reading them all!