User:Jessica nakkoul/Breakfast/Gqc5313 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jessica Nakkouls work


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jessica%20nakkoul/Breakfast?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Peer Review Evaluation
LEAD:

While looking over your lead, I thought that it was good but the first and second sentences could've been combined. Ex: (Many people say breakfast is the most important meal of the day, and that is true, breakfast is very important for our bodies nutrition and helps up stay energized so we should not miss it).

The sentence that it's not just an American thing feels opinionated, of course breakfast is not just one nations tradition, its a universal thing, I would either take that out or change it so it may be like this (Breakfast is experienced around the world in many different forms and with different breakfast foods. Our traditional eggs, toast or bacon with coffee is not the same in every country) then I would go on to describe some other countries breakfast so it gives an example for people who may not know.

CONTENT:

The content is good, it is lacking though in abundance of information. I would definitely use more than two sources for information just so that its more detailed and has even more information. Maybe some things you could add into the content is information about different breakfast's around the world as said before, or adding information about the downsides of not eating breakfast, medically sourced information though. I would also add the benefits (medically) about eating breakfast. I think those little things could supplement your article. Also just one little spelling error for "Less"

TONE AND BALANCE:

I would make the article less like "eating breakfast is good because its good for you and you should do it so you can have energy" and would just make it more informative toned.

REFERENCES:

Your sources are not cited correctly, the source should be in a little indentation above the last word like this, that random citation is just an example. I would change that around. Also, use the little article draft at the bottom of the page so you can accurately space everything apart a little easier. Also references will be easier to do then.

Everything else in your article is good, I would just do the above things to supplement it a bit and make it just a little more than what it is.