User:Jessica nakkoul/Breakfast/Jqp5962 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jessica nakkoul


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jessica nakkoul/Breakfast
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * User:Jessica nakkoul/Breakfast

Evaluate the drafted changes
I really like the points that are brought up in this page, however there are a few key components that are lacking in this draft. There is not a clear lead. It is difficult to determine if there is one due to the lack of headings, which would indicate which paragraph is which. The content is definitely relevant to the topic and provides alot of useful information. The content seems to come from a neutral position and seems to cover alot of important points. I did not notice many visible gaps in information in this draft. There appear to be references to back up the information, however the links in the text do not work. The references section is also not inputted correctly. The References heading needs to be bolded as well. The overall organization is good, but it needs to be polished for the final draft. Headings need to be added and the references section needs to be cleaned up. The links also have to be fixed. Overall, this wikipedia page is heading in the right direction.