User:Jessicaisyijhen/Emmett McBain/Rkitam Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jessicaisyijhen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jessicaisyijhen/Emmett McBain
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Emmett McBain
 * Emmett McBain

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

Overall short concise and no additional information that is not covered in the other section. More information from the biography can be added to increase the notability of the person.

Content

The information looks balanced and covers his notable accomplishments that makes him a notable figure.

Tone and Balance

The tone feels neutral overall— in any of the paragraphs there are no arguments made about him. Some parts could be reworded as it feels a little colloquial.

Sources and References

The information needs to be cited back to the reference using footnote. The sources look credible and reliable to be used.

Organization

Because the content is a little short, it's hard to tell if it's better to split the content in more detail or keep in the same 'biography' section. I think maybe it could be split to 'early life' for his education section and 'career' for others.

Images and Media

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