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Article Evaluation:
Focus on the article's content, tone, and sourcing.


 * Is the article's content relevant to the topic? Are some areas under- or over-developed?
 * The article's content is all relevant to the topic. Some areas (mostly the criticism and defense sections) are underdeveloped.
 * Is it written neutrally?
 * The article is written neutrally; however, there are some sentences that are difficult to understand (***note to clean up sentences structure/grammar).
 * Does each claim have a citation? Are the citations reliable?
 * The sources need to be improved. There are some references in the bibliography that are not being used in the article, some references are blogs, and not all claims are referenced.
 * Does the article tackle one of Wikipedia's equity gaps (coverage of historically underrepresented or misrepresented populations or subjects)?
 * This article does not tackle any equity gaps that I have picked up on.

General Notes/Comments: What can I add/improve

 * Add more depth to the defense section of this article. The defense section is lacking a well-rounded presentation of sources. DONE
 * Clean up the sources! Get rid of the blog sources and replace information with more reliable sources. IMPROVED
 * Improve some sentence structure and grammar issues. DONE
 * There are a lot of quotations throughout the article. IMPROVED
 * Work on the lead section of the article. Humphrey's (2016) has a great description of Slacktivism in the reading IMPROVED

= Possible Sentences/Sections to Add =

The Human Rights Campaign (HRC) on Marriage Equality, offers another example of how slacktivism can be used to make a real difference. The campaign urged Facebook users to change their profile pictures to a red image that had the following symbol in the middle: =. The logo symbolized equality and if Facebook users put the image as their profile photo, it meant they were in support of marriage equality. The campaign was credited for raising positive awareness and cultivating an environment of support for the marriage equality cause.

Black Lives Matter Movement Under Examples
The Black Lives Matter movement calls for the end of systemic racism and unfair treatment from law enforcement toward people of color. The Black Lives Matter movement has been inextricably linked with social media since 2014, in particular on Twitter and with the hashtag #blacklivesmatter or #BLM. The movement is far-reaching due to its digital platform which has allowed for a comprehensive web of allies. Much of the support and awareness of this movement has been made possible through social media; furthermore, studies show that the slacktivist nature of this movement has been linked with a positive effect on active participation in the cause. The fact that participants of this movement were able to contribute from their phones has increased awareness and participation of the public, particularly in the United States. White privilege results in the domination of conventional media and, social media has allowed the Black Lives Matter movement to be heard through establishing a community through a more independent platform.

Copied Sections of the Article for Drafting Message/ Meaning Improvements
The action may have little effect other than to make the person doing it feel satisfied that they have contributed ***this comes across biased. Underlying assumptions (***who has these assumptions?) promoted by the term are that these low-cost efforts are ineffective, and substitute for more substantive actions rather than supplementing them.

The Joint United Nations Programme on HIV/AIDS describes the term "slacktivist", saying it "posits that people who support a cause by performing simple measures are not truly engaged or devoted to making a change". (***is this quote needed? This quote doesn't actually describe slacktivist and appears biased to the reader)

Various people and groups express doubts about the value and effectiveness of slacktivism. Particularly, some skeptics argue that it entails an underlying assumption that all problems can be seamlessly fixed using social media, and while this may be true for local issues, slacktivism could prove ineffective for solving global predicaments.'''***What people, groups, and skeptics express these doubts? The source at the end of these two sentences does not have a working URL.'''

Copied Sections of the Article for Drafting Grammar Improvements
Possible Media to Use


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My Peer Review by Mcooley
Hello! Great start on drafting edits for the Slacktivism page. I like how you mention that there are a lot of quotes throughout the article because this is one of the first things I noticed while reading through it. The lengthy quotes could be paraphrased or ideas pulled from the sources, but it is unnecessary to have so many long quotes. This will be a major edit so I'm glad you picked up on it. Here are some notes I took while reading through the article:

Defense of slacktivism section: - third paragraph, “Others keep a slightly optimistic outlook…” who? This is a broad claim that references an unnamed group. The sentence itself seems unnecessary and could probably be removed. - this whole section seems to be bent in a way that suggests slacktivism can produce awareness but it’s still weak in producing real action. Does this seem skewed to you?

Types section: - - Charity: this section does not seem to have any sources other than for “examples” of charity slacktivism. The first paragraph makes unsupported claims, consider revising. - same as above for the Charity as a by-product of purchasing products section. This section could be combined with the charity section, rather than a separate section. - Political: unsupported claims - Sympathy: unsupported claims

Overall, great start! You have good ideas for where to start on edits for this page, and I think there are some major things that could be improved with your help! Hope this review was helpful. Mcooley509 (talk) 20:29, 23 February 2021 (UTC)

Dr. Hayes' Suggestions/Comments
You have multiple ideas for what you can add/improve and any would be improvements to the article. Select the ones that make the most sense to you. Your peer reviewer offered some great feedback as well so you can incorporate any of those ideas as well. If you are looking for a source in defense of slacktivism this article by Stephanie Vie might interest you. https://firstmonday.org/article/view/4961/3868 DrTraceyJHayes (talk) 22:06, 27 February 2021 (UTC)

What I've Already Changed/Added
''The Black Lives Matter movement calls for the end of systemic racism and unfair treatment from law enforcement toward people of color. The Black Lives Matter movement has been inextricably linked with social media since 2014, in particular on Twitter and with the hashtag #blacklivesmatter or #BLM. The movement is far-reaching due to its digital platform which has allowed for a comprehensive web of allies. Much of the support and awareness of this movement has been made possible through social media; furthermore, studies show that the slacktivist nature of this movement has been linked with a positive effect on active participation in the cause. The fact that participants of this movement were able to contribute from their phones has increased awareness and participation of the public, particularly in the United States. White privilege results in the domination of conventional media and, social media has allowed the Black Lives Matter movement to be heard through establishing a community through a more independent platform. ''
 * 1) Slacktivism (a portmanteau of slacker and activism) (EDIT***tends to be a) pejorative term for the practice of supporting a political or social cause by means such as social media or online petitions, characterized as involving very little effort or commitment.
 * 2) Empirical investigation has found these assumptions are incorrect. ADD HERE: The belief that slacktivism is effective varies across different groups and, support for slacktivism is contingent upon the definition of successful activism.
 * 3) Many websites and news platforms have integrated social media sites such as Facebook and Twitter into their interface, allowing people to easily "like", "share" or "tweet" about something interesting they saw on the Internet. People can now express concern about social or political issues with (nothing more than ***DELETE) the click of a mouse, raising the question of what is actually being accomplished by these "likes" when very little thought or effort is required.
 * 4) In it, Morozov relates slacktivism to the Colding-Jørgensen experiment. In 2009, a Danish psychologist named Anders Colding-Jørgensen created a fictitious Facebook group as part of his research. (DONE).
 * 5) Although slacktivism has often been used pejoratively, some scholars point out that activism within the digital space is a reality. These scholars suggest that slacktivism may not be the end all be all, but it can be a positive contributor to activism and, it is inescapable in the current digital climate.
 * 6) DELETE** Slacktivism is showing support for a cause with the main purpose of boosting the egos of participants in the movement.
 * 7) Use of term section: - Edit for grammar: third paragraph of “Use of the term” section - don’t start a sentence with a number (“125 Facebook members…”) - Make sure end quotes are placed outside the period at the end of a sentence
 * 8) Lead section: - “main purpose of boosting the egos of participants…” can this statement be attributed to a reliable source? If not, it seems to be making a skewed, broad claim that projects the authors opinion
 * 9) Other suggestions/comments: - Consider adding something about the Black Lives Matter movement into the examples section? There was a lot of talk about slacktivism around this movement and it could be interesting to show - Many sentences and paragraphs stand alone without any references; it is unclear whether these sentences are linked to surrounding references, or if they are just written from the author’s opinion. It's important that everything is clearly cited by a reputable source, so this seems like a big issue to resolve.
 * 10) Added citations for the [Citations Needed] in the article.
 * 11) Added a New Section: Black Lives Matter Movement Under Examples


 * 1) Added a source to the defense section of the article. The Human Rights Campaign (HRC) on Marriage Equality, offers another example of how slacktivism can be used to make a real difference. The campaign urged Facebook users to change their profile pictures to a red image that had the following symbol in the middle: =. The logo symbolized equality and if Facebook users put the image as their profile photo, it meant they were in support of marriage equality. The campaign was credited for raising positive awareness and cultivating an environment of support for the marriage equality cause.
 * 2) Deleted the quotation from the lead section because it was biased and not representative of Slacktivism as a whole.
 * 3) Deleted the Malcolm Gladwell Quotation because it was too long and unnecessary.
 * 4) Criticism of slacktivism section: - consider taking out the long quote at the beginning, or paraphrasing to get the main points without having such a long quotation - “Micah White has argued…” who is Micah White? Does this person add value for the reader in terms of understanding the topic? If a source is being paraphrased I don’t think it is necessary to name the author, unless it is a well-known person that adds value to the understanding of the topic - the last paragraph of this section has a “citation needed,” consider looking into this information and trying to find a source to add
 * 5) Clicktivism: third paragraph has no cited sources; are these sentences connected to a source? If not, consider finding a source or removing this paragraph, as it could just be the author’s opinion