User:Jessmanners/Mississippi Cold Case/Helyeah27 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Jessmanners/Mississippi Cold Case


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jessmanners/Mississippi_Cold_Case?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mississippi Cold Case

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

It looks as though the only addition to the original article is the paragraph at the end detailing what happened to the two men suspected of the murder. It states that one of the men admitted to the the kidnapping and assault, but not the murder. However, it doesn't say what happened to them, whether they were charged, faced trial, or simply released. It feels unfinished. More details are needed outlining the after-effects of what happened, if anything, to the suspects.

In my opinion I believe that you can add a little more to the article draft, because it needs more detail. You provided a lot of good factual information throughout your draft, however you would need to expand on it. However other than that it isn't so bad, because it's an article draft, I feel like once you go more in depth it will come out way better.