User:Jessranthony/Archibald Grimké/Ccthehorsie Peer Review

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(Jessranthony)


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The edits were minimal, I would make sure to add a considerate amount more. I understand the article is already pretty good, but it could definitely always benefit from improvement.

The first edit, which reads " Henry was prohibited to free them by a South Carolina law, passed in 1841, that did not allow for the release of slaves through gifts or trusts." I would firstly improve by referring to him as something which differentiates him from his son. In the article you talk about Henry Grimke (the father) and Archibald Henry Grimke. Referring to Archibald Henry Grimke as Henry is unclear, I would refer to him either by his first or last name. If his name is instead Archibald "Henry" Grimke, meaning his name is Archibald, but he was called "Henry," I would clarify that in the beginning of the article. I would also improve the sentence overall by saying instead, "Henry Grimke was prohibited to free his family by a South Carolina law (passed in 1841) which did not allow for the release of slaves through gifts or trusts."

CAPITALIZE FREEDMAN'S SCHOOL

Change second edit to "The Freedman school was founded by Gilbert Pillsbury, who was the brother of abolitionist Parker Pillsbury. Gilbert and his wife recognized Archibald and Francis' talents, and garnered..."

Overall: watch grammar, make grammatical, capitalization, etc. changes to article as it is already, and WRITE MORE.