User:Jewellha/Malacosteus niger/Jmanoog Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jewellha


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jewellha/Pachystomias?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * User:Jewellha/Aristostomias
 * User:Jewellha/Malacosteus niger
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pachystomias
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Aristostomias
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Malacosteus_niger (Links to an external site.)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Pachystomias:

The changes to this article are great! I appreciate that the "Red Light Bioluminescence" section is relatively concise yet conveys a good deal of information regarding the rarity and adaptive significance of red light bioluminescence. You paraphrase your references well, and I saw no issues regarding any sort of potential plagiarism from "close paraphrasing." It may be helpful to combine the "Visual systems" and "Adaptive significance" sections under a single subheading as the section seems a bit fragmented as it currently stands. Also, you may want to edit the date for the third reference to avoid the error message that is currently appearing. You may also want to add a small note about red bioluminescence in the lead to communicate that this trait is relatively rare, making Pachystomias a particularly important genus. Great job!

Aristosomias:

I have very similar notes to those for the Pachystomias draft. Overall, this article looks great and succeeds in communicating the proposed mechanism and purpose of red bioluminescence in Aristostomias. Again, you do a great job of citing your references and paraphrasing them effectively. The main note I would make for this article is related to your comment about run-on sentences. I would maybe adjust the first sentence of the "Red Light Bioluminescence" by breaking it up into two separate ideas or by just not mentioning the Pachystomias at all. Again, it may be useful to add a note about red bioluminescence in the lead. Great job!

Malacosteus niger:

Looks great overall! I really like how you connected all three articles using the in-text Wikipedia links to make it clear that red light bioluminescence is shared by only a small group of fish. I would maybe add a note about the manner in which M. niger is able to derive its phosensitizer from chlorophyll by making a more overt linkage to its diet. Otherwise, everything else is incredibly straightforward! Good work!

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

KarolWalec


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:KarolWalec/sandbox
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Malacosteus niger

Evaluate the drafted changes
With such a complicated mechanism to describe, it would be really easy to use "close paraphrasing" that is not in line with Wikipedia's policies. You did a great job of summarizing the findings of your reference without falling into this trap of "close paraphrasing." It may be useful to expand a bit on how this quality of red bioluminescence is useful for predation, as the article does not make a clear link between red bioluminescence and the inability of prey to see this wavelength (not just those with other forms of blue/green bioluminescence). Otherwise, you did a great job with a very technical addition that will help provide clarity regarding the morphological background behind M. niger 's red bioluminescence.