User:Jfelmgart/Ecotourism/Angelica.gnlz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jfelmgart


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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ecotourism

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

You did a very good job of incorporating the debates; the flow of the section on the impact on indigenous people is very cohesive! Perhaps consider clarifying the statement "Ecotourism does not show the real environment...". It could also be helpful to define the phrase "smallholders' land clearing" or find a way of rewording it. Consider removing the word "therefore" to enhance the encyclopedia voice the professor emphasized. In the final sentence, it may be good to reword the part that says "if the people who care about it"; I completely agree with your thoughts but I think it may not fit that "wikipedia" voice- the tone may not be completely neutral.