User:Jfelmgart/Tourism in Peru/Angelica.gnlz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jfelmgart


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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tourism in Peru

Evaluate the drafted changes
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In the very first sentence, you mention many different types of tourism, consider linking another wikipedia article that discusses them? Or maybe say something like "may different types of tourism including.... Ecotourism in particular...". The mentioning of ecotourism, conservation, and reforestation as possible solutions could stand strong as their own section! Consider elaborating on them, extracting on your needs talk where possible and it would help to elaborate on how exactly they could be solutions. Your section "In in the Piuria Region" fits really well! Maybe consider taking out adjectives like "gorgeous" or the phrase "catch the waves" to help neutralize the tone. I am a but confused by the sentence starting "There is the beginning of dry forest..."- maybe clarify what the word "there" is referring to or consider making it an attached paragraph. Overall, really nice work- I'm excited to see how your PE goes!