User:JhanysG/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Beekeeping

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I have chosen this article to evaluate because I am interested in learning more about the art of beekeeping and have a base knowledge of bees in general.

Evaluate the article
Lead Section


 * Wile the Lead Section addresses relevant basic information and sets up the rest of the article fairly nicely, some of the language and syntax used is overly complicated or clunky and could use revision to be made simpler for general audiences/increase clarity. Ex. "Pollination of crops, raising queens, and production of package bees for sale are other sources of beekeeping income" could become "Other sources of beekeeping income include pollination of crops, raising queens, and production of package bees for sale."
 * This is an issue found throughout the article, though it is an easy fix.
 * As is already marked, the claim that Georgia was the beekeeping cradle of the world requires citation of a reliable source. (point reiterated in Sources and References section)
 * Citation of a reliable source is needed for the following sentence in the Lead Section: "Domestication of bees can be seen in Egyptian art from around 4,500 years ago; there is also evidence of beekeeping in ancient China, Greece, and Maya." (point reiterated in Sources and References section)
 * Citation of a reliable source is needed for the following sentence in the Lead Section: "As beekeeping technology has advanced, beekeeping has become more accessible, and urban beekeeping was described as a growing trend as of 2010." (point reiterated in Sources and References section)

Content


 * All content in the article is relevant to the topic and appears to be up-to-date as much as possible, though it lacks some citation of reliable sources as discussed further in the Sources and References section.
 * The only missing content I could observe was a lack of explanation of the different kinds of bees in a hive (queen, worker, drone) as well as linking to their appropriate articles (all of which exist on Wikipedia).

Tone and Balance


 * The article is well balanced and the tone is kept as observant and unaffected by opinions as far as I could discern. Information is presented without bias, and any claims are almost always supported by a citation and reliable source.

Sources and References


 * As is already marked in the Lead Section, the claim that Georgia was the beekeeping cradle of the world requires citation of a reliable source.
 * Citation of a reliable source is needed for the following sentence in the Lead Section: "Domestication of bees can be seen in Egyptian art from around 4,500 years ago; there is also evidence of beekeeping in ancient China, Greece, and Maya."
 * Citation of a reliable source is needed for the following sentence in the Lead Section: "As beekeeping technology has advanced, beekeeping has become more accessible, and urban beekeeping was described as a growing trend as of 2010."
 * The entirety of the "World apiculture" Section of the article should be revisited to ensure there is no new data to report as well as to go through and add citations to all of the data with unclear origins. While the sources for the table are listed below it, the information provided by those sources is not clearly tracked in a way that explains where all of the data came from; only some of the numbers on the table are marked with citations, leaving the source of the unmarked data uncertain.

Organization and Writing Quality


 * While the organization of the article is clear and has a logical flow into each topic, the writing quality could be improved. Several sentence, as illustrated in the "Lead Section" of this evaluation, could be reworded for additional clarity.

Images and Media


 * The article includes a sufficient amount of relative images and media that are all very well cited and sourced. However, I do think the article would benefit from a section about the structure of the hive (in terms of what the different castes are and what they are responsible for), and a useful image for this section would be one that shows the difference between queens, workers and drones.

Talk Page Discussion


 * All discussions on the Talk page seem to be cordial and friendly. The only thing to note is it is not very robust or active.
 * The article is classified as c-class, and is listed as an article of interest for the following WikiProjects: Agriculture (high importance), Insects (high importance), and Wikipedia 101 (low importance).

Overall Impressions


 * Overall, this article is well balanced with a neutral tone, but it could benefit from clarifying edits and additional citations to ensure all claims are being backed up with reliable sources. The linking could be improved as well, with links to other articles being necessary for understanding certain sections.