User:JianiW/Artificial intelligence industry in China/Njpierce16 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jiani W


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JianiW/Artificial_intelligence_industry_in_China?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Artificial intelligence industry in China

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your article is very detailed and I feel like the content is relevant to the target audience, i.e. AI Readiness and Research & Development. The history section was structured well with the headings describing the dates and the bullet points outline specific key events. It felt efficient and an improvement from the original which was a big paragraph. The section on policy was good but if possible, could you link the document in that table? Maybe they aren't available... Your article definitely needs a lead section though, that would be the biggest area for improvement. Tbh I might incorporate your style of history section into my article so nice job with that!

To get into specifics:

Lead

- The lead section should probably be labeled "lead" rather than summary just to ensure clarity.

- It appears the lead hasn't been altered from he original so I'd guess you haven't had the chance to update it.

- When you update it, make sure to include the brief overview of the sections that will appear in your article.

- The lead at this stage in concise, but it needs more content. Make sure to only include content that will be relevant to the article as a whole.

Content

- The content seems relevant to me although I don't know much about AI. I get the feeling though that you do understand AI and what someone concerned with the subject would be looking for.

- I feel like there may be some content that is missing section-wise. Perhaps a dedicated Economics section, maybe a Politics section, possibly an International Relations section? Idk, those are just suggestions.

- The content seems up to date, nice job including future projections

Tone and Balance

- The content all appears neutral. The overall tone is informative, I didn't notice any areas where it felt biased.

- I didn't get the idea of persuasive language, all topics are covered to a reasonable extent

Sources and References

- There are a significant number of resources referenced here

- I would suggest updating the URLs in the references because I feel people are less likely to check sources if they have to input the url. You want the links to be active to verify the source validity.

- From checking a few of the references, the information seems to be cited properly and is up to date

- There are what I assume to be books linked, I don't really understand the process for citing books tbh. If they are PDF documents or journals you found online its worth citing the location of the website you found it at and even including a URL so that people can check those sources.

- I noticed under the notable companies section that there were "citation needed" icons, you might consider removing any information that isn't properly cited.

Organization

- The content is well-written, it seemed concise but informative

- I personally wasn't sure about the way the article was organized initially because it was different from most Wikipedia articles I've read. It doesn't feature typical headings like "Demographics", "Economy", etc. besides "History", but if you've looked at similar articles in the same category or WikiProject and they are structured similarly then that's all good. Like I mentioned before, the content seems solid and relevant

- The organization of the headings does feel cohesive and builds upon the sections, so that's good.

Images and Media

- There aren't really any examples of this, and I feel your article may benefit from some media or image content. It feels aesthetically dry if that makes sense, not super engaging for a casual reader to look at. This may not be what you're going for anyway, and you wouldn't wanna clutter the article with useless images, but some kind of media to break up the paragraphs could go a long way to increase engagement.

- You do have the tables in there which are relevant and informative

Overall Impression

- The content added has enhanced the article. It felt like a big step up content wise with the introduction of the policy, AI readiness, and R&D sections. They were comprehensive and informative while reading neutrally. The article can be improved by a more fleshed lead section that outlines the article, improved references with active URL links, and possibly images to enhance understanding and engagement. It may be worth incorporating an Economics section with models or projections detailing how China's AI industry impacts both China's economy and the global economy.