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Nobuyoshi Araki

Sentimental journey "1972-1992" is a diary of his marriage life with his wife Aoki Yoko till the day she lost her fight to ovarian cancer in 1990. The first part of the series sees the couple embarking on marriage life – going to honeymoon and having sex.

In 1964, Araki received the first Sun Prize - an acclaimed award in the Japanese world of photography, and in 1999, Araki became the chair of jurors for the Sun Prize.

In 1990, Araki was awarded the Society of Photography Award in Japan.

In 1991, Araki achieved the 7th Higashikawa Prize

In 1994, Araki won the Japan Inter-Design Forum Grand Prix.

In 2005，an American director, Travis Klose recorded a documentary for Nobuyoshi Araki called Arakimentari, which discusses his personal lifestyles and his arts.

In 2010, Nobuyoshi Araki's beloved cat, Chiro died of old age.

In October of 2013, Nobuyoshi Araki lost the vision in his right eye due to a retinal artery obstruction. Despite this, the 74 years old man utilised this as an inspiration to exhibit his works, called "Love on the left eye", which was held on the 21st of June 2014 at the Taka Ishii Gallery, Tokyo, Japan.

10 March exercises
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Hendon
This is the very first paragraph of the article. Think about punctuation. Is there anything missing? And what about the reference?

Hendon is a London suburb situated in the London Borough of Barnet. 7 mi northwest of Charing Cross. Hendon was ancient parish in the county of Middlesex and has formed part of Greater London since 1965.

Hendon Aerodrome
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Hendon Aerodrome was an aerodrome in Hendon, north London, England that was an important centre for aviation between 1908 and 1968.

Middlesex University
The first paragraph. Look at just the first and last sentences. There is a stylistic issue, an issue with capital letters, and ambiguity. Can you spot the ambiguity?

Middlesex University (abbr. MU or MDX) is a university in Hendon, North west London, England. It is located within the historic county boundaries of Middlesex from which it takes its name. It is one of the new universities and is a member of Million+ working group. As is the case with many former polytechnics, Middlesex was formally organised as a teaching institution in 1973, yet can trace its history back to 19th century.

Middlesex University
The start of the "History" section of the same article. Look at the second and last sentences. Can you spot the ambiguity and the redundancy?

The university grew out of merger between different schools and colleges in North London. Perhaps the most prominent and one of the oldest of its constituent establishments is the Hornsey College of Art, founded in 1882. Other institutions include Ponders End Technical Institute (founded in 1901) and Hendon Technical Institute (founded in 1939). All three institutions were successfully amalgamated to form Middlesex Polytechnic in January 1973.