User:Jiayi Yan/Li Wenyi/Cliopentimento Peer Review

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Wonderful work here! You've done an excellent job writing a lengthy and detailed history. It flows very well. It's logically organized, and you did excellent research.

My one critique is that it seems to end prematurely. What happened between 1949 and 1997 when she died? Even having a brief section on her later life will be useful.

I'm going to make some edits and questions to address in BOLD ALL-CAPS below (and words I have put in bold brackets, I'm suggesting you delete):

Li Wenyi (李文宜 1903-1997), born in Wuhan, Hubei, graduated from Hubei Nü Zi Shi Fan Xue Xiao (Hubei Girls’ School of Education), Chinese woman activist, politician. (THIS SENTENCE IS MISSING A VERB; IT'S A SENTENCE FRAGMENT) Her activism begun BEGAN as early as 1922 as she started to get involved in THE Women's Movement Alliance (WMA) to advocate for women's equal rights and political participation in China, promoting female labor protection and education equality. In 1926, she joined Kuomingtang (KMT) and Communist Party of China (CCP), and was then expelled by both [WHEN?], but her affiliation with both was maintained through out THROUGHOUT her activism. (HOW WAS HER AFFILIATION WITH BOTH MAINTAINED IF SHE WAS EXPELLED BY THEM? DO YOU MEAN THAT SHE LATER RE-AFFILIATED WITH THEM?) When the War of Resistance broke out in 1938, Li Wenyi joined A local women's resistance group to defend her hometown. In 1943, under commission (UNDER COMMISSION OF WHOM? NOT SURE WHAT THIS MEANS), Li Wenyi traveled to Kunming, Yunnan and [built her major left-wing activism there] "DEVELOPED HER LEFT-WING ACTIVISM THERE" WOULD BE BETER, including A women's press (DID SHE CREATE/FOUND THESE THINGS? IF SO EXPLAIN THAT?), A women's reading group, and academic seminars to educate local women. During the Civil War (1945-1949), Li Wenyi, along with her colleagues, supported the CCP's establishment of a new China and joined the national All-China Women's Federation (ACWF) upon the founding of the People's Republic of China. Her tireless dedication and unwavering commitment to advancing women's rights and democracy played a pivotal role in shaping China's trajectory toward greater equality and political participation for women.

In 1922, Li Wenyi emerged as a prominent figure within the Women's Movement Alliance (WMA) as a staunch advocate for democracy and women's rights, consistently pressing for women's suffrage and political participation. [3] The Women's Movement Alliance (WMA) is a group of organizations and activists focused on women's rights and gender equality. They work together to promote women's empowerment, gender equality, and social justice. WMA connects individuals and groups working on issues such as women's rights, gender-based violence, reproductive health, and economic equity. She maintained strong affiliations with the CCP and the Communist Youth League, which provided crucial support and guidance for her various political activities, particularly within the realms of the democratic movement and women's rights advocacy. [3] Within the Hunan Women's Movement League, Li Wenyi spearheaded several crucial initiatives alongside fellow women activists. These initiatives encompassed calls for the repeal of the Police Law which also known as law enforcement law or criminal law, is the body of legal principles and regulations that govern the activities and conduct of law enforcement agencies and officers. The inclusion of women in electoral legislation, and the incorporation of provisions safeguarding women's labor rights in the Labor Protection Law.

Start of a Political Career
In 1926, Li Wenyi embarked on her political career by joining the KMT and CCP. This was a significant step given the volatile political climate in China during that era (THIS WORDING IS VAGUE AND UNCLEAR. PERHAPS JUST CUT "THIS WAS A SIGNIFICANT STEP" AND WRITE "DURING A TIME OF POLITICAL VOLATILITY IN CHINA, THE KMT AND CCP NAVIGATED..." ETC ), with the KMT and CCP navigating a complex and often contentious relationship WITH EACH OTHER?. Her work alongside prominent communist leaders Deng Yingchao and Cai Chang in the CCP women's committee, as part of the First KMT-CCP United Front during the National Revolution, was crucial in the fight against foreign imperialism and domestic warlords.

However, Li's journey was fraught with challenges. In 1927, she was persecuted by the KMT due to her communist affiliations and faced a controversial expulsion from the CCP. Officially, her CCP expulsion was for not seeking permission for a personal task. However, it was later revealed that internal political struggles within the CCP were the actual cause.

Despite these setbacks, Li's commitment to political activism remained steadfast. During the War of Resistance in 1938, UNITED FRONT POLITICS ENABLED HER TO REKINDLE HER CONNECTIONS WITH BOTH THE CCP AND KMT (IS THIS TRUE?), AND she was actively involved in women's resistance organizations in Hubei [and''']. SHE [played]''' a significant role in the defense of Wuhan, joining other female activists from across the country.

Li's influence continued to be felt in the 1940s. In 1943, in recognition of her political experience, she was invited by Hua Gang and Zhou Xinmin, appointed by the CCP, to help establish the Yunnan branch of the Democratic League in Kunming.

Main Activism and Political Activities in Kunming (1943-1946)
Arrival in Kunming

Li Wenyi was married to Zhou Xinmin, who was both part of the KMT and the CCP. WHEN AND WHERE? Her relationship with Zhou did not help her much when it came to establishing political connections with fragmented communist women’s groups. (WHY NOT? CONSIDER TOO WHAT INFORMATION IS NECESSARY TO INCLUDE AND WHAT IS NOT NECESSARY) However, Zhou’s role as the, later appointed, INSTEAD OF SAYING LATER APPOINTED, JUST PROVIDE THE YEAR IN WHICH SHE WAS APPOINTED chairman of The Kunming League of Democratic Political Groups did play a role in Li Wenyi’s arrival into the group in August of 1943 as an organizer. She took that role due to her prior experience of being an underground organizer for the CCP.

In 1943, Li Wenyi was a participant of the Southwest Central Research Society meeting that hosted many professors and others FROM THROUGHOUT CHINA? in the academic setting to talk about CCP policies and other internal and external issues. This was relevant to Li due to the women’s groups in Kunming being heavily related to academics, both for KMT and CCP. She had the task of bringing together women’s groups. '''OF BRINGING TOGETHER ACADEMIC WOMEN'S GROUPS? MAKE SURE THERE ARE CONNECTIONS AMONG YOUR SENTENCES'''

'''ALSO, WHERE HAD SHE BEEN LIVING BEFORE AND WHEN DID SHE MOVE TO KUNING? TELL US THIS INFO IN THIS SECTION'''

A Breakthrough: The Women’s Day Celebration, 1944
Li Wenyi, with no political connections in Kunming, aimed to start a left-wing women's movement by first making 100 friends before Women’s Day in 1944. Her High Court job in Yunnan Province led her to befriend Yang Suhui, BRIEFLY ID/EXPLAIN WHO THIS WAS who introduced her to her friends. By late 1943, Li Wenyi had formed a women's reading group of about 30 members. To expand this group, she approached Zhong Shaoqin, director-general of the local Young Women's Christian Association (YWCA), who agreed to merge the reading group with the YWCA, renaming it the Career Women's Community (CWC). However, the expansion faced challenges as the YWCA office relocated shortly after TO SOMEWHERE OUTSIDE OF KUNMING?, hindering member attendance, and by Women’s Day 1944, the Community had only 46 members.

The 1944 Women’s Day celebration marked a significant breakthrough for Li to broaden her influence and build political rapport. Li Wenyi initiallly INITIALLY planned to publish a special Women’s Day newspaper issue and she had successfully secured space in several major Kunming newspapers, including Saodang Bao (扫荡报), Guomin Ribao (国民日报), Yunnan Ribao (云南日报),  Zhengyi Bao (正义报). Learning that Zhang Jinghua, the women leader iof KMT, had a similar celebration idea, Li tactfully (CUT "TACTFULLY" AND OTHER VALUE-LADEN WORDS) shared her planned articles for the Guomin Ribao (国民日报) with the KMT to avoid conflict and foster good relations. This gesture won her favor with the KMT, leading to her drafting the opening speech for Gu Yingqiu, the governor's wife, and an invitation for her group WHAT WAS HER GROUP? to ATTEND the KMT’s Women’s Day event. Following Women’s Day, the Community's membership nearly doubled, approaching 100 members.

Turning Point: Break from YWCA, Move toward CWA
However, CWC’s success and popularity entailed resentment from the YWCA, resulting in its exclusion from YWCA’s decision-making,. IN RESPONSE, [in response to which], THE CWC was renamed as Joy Group to assert its independence without causing disturbance within THE YWCA. Within a year, Joy Group held over a dozen public talks and seminars to educate local women, featuring renowned scholars from Xi’nan Lianda, and the financial cost was minimal thanks to Li Wenyi’s academic network. By the end of 1944, Joy Group recruited 117 members and engaged broadly with social and political issues, demonstrating  a left-wing political stance, and they even organized a nurse-training class at YWCA’s dormitory.

Constantly working for THE YWCA without being paid or included in the decision-making process, Joy Group broke from THE YWCA and lost its legal status,'''. HOWEVER [therefore] THEY''' couldn’t get involved in Kunming’s public activities alone. Subsequently, Li Wenyi was commissioned to establish a Yunnan branch of the China Women’s Association (CWA)--formed under the United-Front framework during the War of Resistance (1937-1945), affiliated with CCP’s south Bureau and consisting of women activists from a wide range of organizations and parties– (USE A COMMA HERE, NOT A DASH) which granted legal status to the Joy Group. The Yunnan Women's Association and its official publication, Funü Xunkan (妇女旬刊), were officially registered in Kunming. This move facilitated Li Wenyi's network development with local left-wing women activists and female students and the Association also strengthened its institutional and political connections with Chongqing by its publication.

After her three fruitful years in Kunming, Li Wenyi as well as her colleagues arrived in major cities controlled by KMT (Beijing, Nanjing, Shanghai) during the Civil War (1945-1949). THEY ARRIVED AND STARTED ORGANIZING WOMEN THERE?

Late Stage Activism (1946-1949)
The Civil War was characterized by administrative turmoil, military threats, and economic decline. In KMT-controlled urban areas such as Shanghai, Beijing, and Nanjing, political activists faced persecution for suspected affiliations with the CCP, and independent women activists struggled to continue their work amid the political chaos. In CCP-liberated areas, the CCP welcomed women activists who found it hard (WHO FOUND WHAT HARD? ADJUST WORDING) in KMT-controlled regions, (SPLIT THIS INTO TWO SENTENCES WITH A BREAK HERE) and henceforth, leaders of the CWA, including Li Dequan, Cao Mengjun, Xu Guangping, and Li Wenyi, who had been active in KMT-controlled urban areas, traveled to CCP-controlled Xibaipo and Shenyang to support the CCP in establishing a new government.

In April 1949, six months before the founding of the People's Republic of China, the All-China Women's Federation (ACWF) was established in Beijing. Li Wenyi, along with other prominent CWA leaders like Li Dequan, Shi Liang, and Liu-Wang Liming, was elected into the executive and standing committees of the ACWF. The federation's inaugural resolution emphasized the unification of Chinese women against the KMT as the sole path to women's liberation and the construction of a new China. Notably, Li Wenyi expressed dissent regarding the dominance of CCP women leaders within the federation. '''WHY AND HOW? EXPLAIN THIS A BIT MORE'''

If you can create a section that explains what happened to her after 1949, even if it's brief, that would be great.

'''Wonderful work on this! Please contact me if you have any questions. KM'''