User:Jiayue zhang/sandbox/berlin

Spelling/Grammar
Needs Lots of Improvement
 * Note: Not to be rude, but there are lots of grammatical errors that you should look over like. For example should say the the East German government instead of East Germany Government for example. Although, i'm sure Michael will be lenient on this.

Language
Needs Improvement
 * Note: I'd through in some fancier words. You can use a thesaurus and have it be very beneficial to you.

Organization
Meets Standard Note: Your organization is very good. I like how you subdivided sections.

Coding
Meets Standard
 * Note: You could have more blue links. For names especially.

Validity
Meets Standard Meets Standard

Relevance
 Meets Standard
 * Note: Good information. You have drawn good key material from your sources. I'd think that it would be interesting to add that Angela Merkel lived in East Germany and that is how she encountered Vladimir Putin when he was serving as a KGB agent.

Peer Reviews
Jiayue, your use of information and citations is good. All the sources I've looked at have been scholarly sources, so I think you did a good job there. The information you provide and present is useful and beneficial. There are a considerable number of grammatical and word usage issues, a problem which I do not judge, I just wish to help. I would review how and when 'the' is and can be used, it's a complicated rule that you did relatively well with, but it should be The Berlin Wall when at the beginining of a paragraph or sentence. In your titles, while you correctly capitalized The(first word of title) and Berlin, in this case, division should have a capital D. The B in background, as well as the first letter of all the words besides 'and' in your second heading. Also capitalize each section as it is a section title and a title always has the first word and every meaningful word capitalized, to put a very complex and stupid rule of English simply. Lastly, there are some issues with prepositions and tenses like perhaps starting off instead with "Germany was defeated in World War II, and in the argument about rebuilding Germany, the victors were unable to agree on an answer." I would be willing to help you edit it for these grammatical things if you would like further help. E-mail me at rooney2@pdx.edu if you need anything. Also, the word "dismantling," is I think what you mean by "dismantlement," which isn't a word at least to my knowledge, but I admit I could be wrong, I just think dismantling works as a better word. Your citations are very complete and you have clearly figured out the Wikipedia interface much more clearly, however don't forget to bracket link undefined topics to other Wikipedia pages such as Soviet Union, Iron Curtain, Totalitarianism(to clarify this is done with before word and after word). Overall content(3/4)- Some is confusing primarily due to usage issues Grammar and usage(2/4)- Needs Improvement, though not too bad Citation (4/4)- Well Done Rooney2pdx (talk) 00:58, 19 March 2018 (UTC)

background
Germany is the defeated nation in World War Ⅱ. For the argument about rebuilding Germany, victors’ inability to agree on an answer. The Soviet Union did not agree to merge the German-occupied territories and rejected Western economic policies. The contradiction between the victors of the war, especially for the Soviet Union between other capitalist nations, lead to the division of Germany. Berlin Wall was the border defense which was built by East Berlin government, and that is the sign of the Iron Curtain and totalitarianism.

the relationship between East Berlin and West Berlin
East Berlin government and West Berlin government attempt to divide Berlin from politics, economy, and other aspects through Berlin Wall, but culture, environment, and population cannot be divided. Environmental problems helped to ensure the survival of cross-border relations and that makes the relationship between East Berlin and West Berlin became complicated. Since 1960, East Germany government thought  people who cross the Berlin Wall seem as the illegally cross the border, and shoot the border crossers. The relationship between East Germany and West Germany improved in 1970, but East Germany government raised the Berlin Wall in order to avoid people to cross the border. From 1971 to 1972, East Germany government and West Germany government sign some agreements to improve the relationship between GDR (the Germany Democratic Republic) and the GFR (the Germany Federal Republic). The agreements eased the relations between GDR and GFR, and loosened the restriction of cross the border.

The dismantlement of Berlin Wall
In 1989, the Hungarians opened their border for citizens of the GDR to exit freely and the Soviet leader Gorbachev began the reform in the Soviet Union. Under the influence of that,  since May 1989,  a large number of the citizen from the Germany Democratic Republic fled to the Germany Federal Republic through Hungary. When 200, 000 East Germans took advantage of Hungary’s decision to open its borders and fled to the West, their communist government decided to modify the travel restrictions that imprisoned them. On October 1989, the leader of East Germany officially announced his resignation and many cities had been the mass demonstration. Because of that, East Germany government announced that they would reform socialism and relaxed the rule of the private tourism and immigrant. Due to the misunderstanding of superior’s order by Günter Schabowski who is the East Germany government official. Günter Schabowski erroneously declared the relaxation of the private exit restrictions by the government as an immediate opening of the Berlin Wall. in tens of thousands of citizens entering the West through the Berlin Wall. In Berlin, the Berlin Wall was artificially demolished. A large number of citizens entered the West Berlin through the Berlin Wall and the Berlin Wall began to be artificial demolished. On June 1990, the East Germany government began to dismantle the Berlin Wall.

Moving the capital
After the dismantlement of the Berlin Wall, East and West Germany began to make a decision about the reunification of Germany. The first thing is to decide the capital of Germany. On the House of Representatives, 330  tickets voted Berlin as the national capital of Germany,  and 320 tickets voted Bonn as the national capital of Germany. On June 1991, The Lower House of the German decided to move the national government from Bonn to Berlin. The process of the capital move in Berlin took about 10 years. During the process, government should balance the social, economic, and cultural difference between the East German and West Germany, and the population structure had changed in Bonn because of the capital movement. In the national capital movement plan, some institutions would move in Berlin, such as the Bundestag and Germany's lower house, and some institutions would move out of from Berlin, such as the German federal administrative court. On the other hand, the movement of national capital is the symbol of the German reunification. In 2001, the German Chancellery had been built, and that is the symbol of the accomplishment of the capital movement in Germany.