User:Jieun7553/Robot Taekwon V/Reesepitch Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jieun7553


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jieun7553/Robot_Taekwon_V?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Robot Taekwon V

Evaluate the drafted changes
The current organization and layout of the article is very good, and provides places for all the necessary information on the page. While the article is quite long, this is good as it covers lots of information about the film without repeating much of itself. One thing I would I would suggest is perhaps finding another way of organizing the article in a way that flows better, as there are sometimes leaps in information that can be confusing. I would suggest looking at a well written article of another film to use as a guideline.

Also, the analysis section currently reads not entirely neutral, instead it seems to be leaning into the intentions of the film a bit too much. Perhaps finding a way to present the aim of the film in a way that considers both the pros and cons of this could be helpful.

Overall the article is quite good, but the biggest problem in it to me is the grammar. There are is a lot of grammar that could be changed to be clearer, and a lot of the sentences are structured the same. Spending some time re-editing the article to fix grammar would help it a lot.