User:Jillianmm31/Domestic violence in the United States

User:Jillianmm31/Domestic violence in the United States

Article Draft
Hi Andrew and Sam,

I have included some edits and what I want to work on for the rest of the semester. The comments are in bold.

-Jillian

*Italics and bolded means this is what the final result will be on the Wikipedia article.

Lead
Domestic violence is a form of violence that occurs within a domestic relationship. Although domestic violence often occurs between partners in the context of an intimate relationship, it may also describe other household violence, such as violence against a child, by a child against a parent or violence between siblings in the same household. In the United States, it is recognized as an important social problem by governmental and non-governmental agencies, and various Violence Against Women Acts have been passed by the US Congress in an attempt to stem this tide.I will revise the lead sentence of the article as Samantha recommended and added "United States" to the third sentence to show how this Wikipedia article focuses on domestic violence in the United States.

Globally
I am not sure there needs to be a section on “Globally” on “Domestic Violence in the United States” because we are talking about the United States specifically, not the rest of the world. We do not need to know how the Secretary-General of the UN views the issue, especially a report from 2006. Thus, I will remove it in my revision.

Gender aspects of abuse
In the United States, according to the Bureau of Justice Statistics in 1995 women reported a six times greater rate of intimate partner violence than men (As shown with this previous report from the early 2000s, a lot of the information in the article comes from more than ten years ago. To understand the issue today, the facts need to be revised in a timely manner. It is important to know the previous information on the gender rate of domestic violence in the United States, but what about the rate report of intimate partner violence in 2023? They did provide statistics on the number of women murdered per day by their intimate partner in a study from 2019. However, there must be more recent information available in the last two to three years at this point). I will look into updating these statistics from a more recent study.

''' Revision for this statistic : According to the Centers for Disease Control and Prevention (CDC), in 2022 individuals identifying as women and men reported intimate partner violence around 41% and 26%, respectively, in the United States. '''

Murder
Women are more likely than men to be murdered by an intimate partner. Of those killed by an intimate partner, about three quarters are female and about a quarter are male. In 1999 in the United States, 1,218 women and 424 men were killed by an intimate partner, and 1,181 females and 329 males were killed by their intimate partners in 2005. In 2007, 2,340 deaths were caused by intimate partner violence—making up 14% of all homicides. 70% of these deaths were females and 30% were males.

''In the United States, firearms have played a role in domestic violence. Compared to other nations, the United States is the number one country for owning guns in the world. '' According to the National Coalition Against Domestic Violence (NCADV), there has been a rise of 500% of death when a firearm is present during domestic violence. I added this to the murder statistics section.

Effects on children
“Up to 10 to 20% children in the United States witness abuse of a parent or caregiver annually. As a result, they are more likely to experience neglect or abuse, less likely to succeed at school, have poor problem-solving skills, subject to higher incidence of emotional and behavioral problems, and more likely to tolerate violence in their adult relationships. Complicating this already bleak picture, parental psychopathology in the wake of domestic violence can further compromise the quality of parenting, and in turn increase the risk for the child's developing emotional and behavioral difficulties if mental health care is not sought. The language of “Complicating this already bleak picture” gives off the assumption that this percentage is negative. I am not saying that negativity cannot be shown or inferred, but this flowery language seems more like the writer of this information’s opinion than an objective statement. I want to fix this in my edits to this article.

 Revised: In the wake of domestic violence, parental psychopathology can further compromise the quality of parenting, and in turn, increase the risk for the child's developing emotional and behavioral difficulties if mental health care is not sought.

Laws
Victims of domestic violence are offered legal remedies that are both civil and criminal in nature.


 * Criminal law remedies include the criminal prosecution of the offender, and possible restraints on the offender's behavior during periods of pretrial release or as part of a criminal sentence.


 * Civil law remedies include the possibility of obtaining a protection order.

These remedies are not exclusive, meaning that a victim may seek both the criminal prosecution of the offender and also petition for civil remedies.

At the end of every paragraph, there should be some reference to support the information on Wikipedia, as shown in the training modules. 'I want to figure out what sources were used and cite them. I was able to find a report that discusses most of these elements so I added it as the source.'

Community activism by men
Throughout the article, there is a mention of how men experience domestic violence in the United States as well, such as how men use community activism. Nonetheless, they are still portrayed as a secondary group to domestic violence for the most part in the piece. I think there should be more of a discussion of men abused by women or their partners to create a more equal dialogue on the issue. I will look into information about groups who prioritize men who are victims and give them places to go for resources.

Revision added to this paragraph: Men's groups against domestic violence and forced rape, found around the world, take measures to reduce their use of violence. Typical activities include group discussions, education campaigns and rallies, work with violent men, and workshops in schools, prisons and workplaces. Actions are frequently conducted in collaboration with women's organizations that are involved in preventing violence against women and providing services to abused women. In the United States alone, there are over 100 such men's groups, many of which focus specifically on sexual violence. In San Jose, California, men and boys who have faced domestic abuse can attend support groups and workshops and receive counseling through Next Door Solutions to Domestic Violence (NDS).