User:Jillianmm31/Domestic violence in the United States/Mundozurdo Peer Review

General info
Jillianmm31
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jillianmm31/Domestic violence in the United States
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Domestic violence in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Jillian,

First of all, I think all of your proposed improvements are great and will go a long way towards improving the article! Here's some bullet points on my thoughts about each individual revision:

- Globally: I agree that this section isn't super pertinenet to the specific context being presented by the article so I second your decision to remove it. The image in the section (showing countrie's by women's physical security) is pretty interesting though so perhaps there is something similar and more current that you can include?

- Incidence: I think including more timely statistics is a great way to keep the article up-to-date: I've used the Nat'l Coalition Against Domestic Violence as well as NIH websites for resources so those might be worth checking out if you haven't already done so.

- Statistics: I think your addition emphasizing the role of guns is super important as it ties these two public health crises together, do you plan on expanding on firearm-related violence at all?

- Socio-economic impacts: I agree with your assessment of the language and your proposed change - I imagine you've already thought of it but balancing it out with neutral language is def a focus.

- Laws: Improving the citations is always a solid way of contributing and I think it would go a long way not only clarifying where those remedies come from but also in providing people a starting point for people to go in depth.

- Reduction Programs: In many ways, this strikes me as one of the most important contributions someone could make. Providing resources is a great way of putting social justice in practice, especially in a place like Wikipedia that has such a broad user base. I look forward to seeing what you find!

All in all, your improvements are really thoughtful and go far beyond surface-level edits so I appreciate the chance to read your work at this stage! Let me know if you want more feedback now or later on in the semester!

- Andrew :)