User:Jillianr18/Politainment/Leahgburke24 Peer Review

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Jillianr18
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 * Politainment

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Hi Leah,
 * I think Jillian did a great job adding to this article. I think adding the section of "example of politainment in the US" is very helpful for the reader though I think each bullet point needs more context. I would recommend going more in depth about the start and end dates for each period. Building off of that I would also add more information about the media aspect that goes into each time period and how it has either changed or stayed the same.
 * I also think that the section below the "example of politainment in the US" discussing politiainment outside the US is insightful but could be added to. Are there anymore countries and/or regions outside of America that discuss the idea of politianment? If so, I think it would be very helpful to add these in as well.

Thanks for you suggestions. We do already have a section for example outside of America, but appreciate your thoughts.

''Response (Lauren): We definitely plan on adding much more context to each bullet point. Concerning the start and end dates of each period, I am wondering how that could be best done. The time period's were more so guiltiness to break out the examples and showcase how politianment has changed through decades, but I can see how more clear dates may been beneficial. Thank you for your feedback!''