User:Jillianr18/Politainment/Otakacs1508 Peer Review

General info
Jillianr18
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Jillianr18/Politainment
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Politainment

Evaluate the drafted changes
First Suggestion: I think you are off to a great start. I think you need to add important figures who use the concept Politainment so readers have an understanding what to think of when thinking about this subject. I like how you added MAGA but add other ideas and people tell help them have a clear picture.

''[Jillian] I think this will be particularly helpful with the international examples section. The articles listed under the international section all reference various leaders that capitalize on politainment. However, I think that Obama, Trump, and Biden have all encountered politainment in their presidencies and campaigns. We'll add specifics for all three.''

Second Suggestion: I also like the quotes you added. But I think with the quotes you should have some explanation added to provide more context to them.

''[Jillian] I do not see any quotes in our work, but there are some quotes that lack description on the page. Maybe we can add some descriptions for those.''

Response (Lauren): ''Thank you for your feedback! I am wondering how we could best add important figures in politiainment. Especially since politainment is not just 'used' by political elites,''

''We did discuss as a group the fact that the quotes, which were in the original article, feel a bit out of place, so thank you for the additional confirmation on that. Perhaps they aren't needed at all and could be cut from article, or replaced with more relevant quotes.''