User:Jillyfish/Biological globalization/Smruc Peer Review

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Jillyfish


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Evaluate the drafted changes
Good lead that describes the topic really well. I like the historical take on globalization that you took, it really tied the topic together. I additionally enjoyed reading about the modern globalization and the differences versus similarities of the early history of globalization. Everything is nice and concise with the lead. I was wondering, maybe to make it more user friendly, if you can separate the "Early History" section into other sub-headings? That way it may be less daunting than being faced with one large paragraph. With sub-headings article page viewers may be able to better navigate to the areas of the page that they want more information on. The content added is neutral, you clearly don't take a particular side with the topic but more all the information relayed is more of a broad overview (which provides good knowledge for someone who is new to the topic and wants to get a general sense of the topic). It's not too intense in terms of content and is well written (just make sure to check sentence structure in a few of your sentences). I like the layout and how there is a nice flow to the information. I wonder if maybe adding some images might break up the large paragraph you have for the "Early History" section. Maybe adding some photos might be a nice addition (either an image of a person or something that has been globalized). In one section you talked about certain wildlife/fruits so you can maybe try to find an image on the wikicommons page about those particular things to add some visuals. My overall impression is that it is a really well written article (again just remember some sentence structure formalities and some grammatical tweaks) but other than those small scale changes it's a strong article and I enjoyed reading about it. I was unsure what it was going into the topic and after reading it I found that I had a better grasp of what the topic was (which is the point of a wiki article) so I think that the article really nailed it! Awesome job!