User:Jimzhen21/Common-pool resource/Alexdaviesmorris Peer Review

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Jimzhen21


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Great work Jim! I love how consistent you are in maintaining an Encyclopedic voice and the fact that you generated visuals to better demonstrate your work. Also, in your last two sections, I really appreciate how you organized every topic into different bullet points. This is so smart in helping readers' comprehension, keeping them engaged, and helping them retain as much of the information as possible. I thought everything from your content to your formatting is great, my only note would be, in my opinion, in your last two sections when you make each bullet point a different factor, change the "." after each factor to a ":" because, for me, I thought you were just using a fragmented sentence at first rather than presenting a key term and then following with its effects on CPR. Otherwise, nice job!!